User talk:Brad.miller.87
DYK nomination of United States v. Kilbride
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Hello! Your submission of United States v. Kilbride at the Did You Know nominations page has been reviewed, and there still are some issues that may need to be clarified. Please review the comment(s) underneath your nomination's entry and respond there as soon as possible. Thank you for contributing to Did You Know! Yoninah (talk) 16:51, 8 March 2011 (UTC)
DYK for United States v. Kilbride
[edit] | On 12 March 2011, Did you know? was updated with a fact from the article United States v. Kilbride, which you recently nominated. The fact was ... that it is both possible and potentially illegal to falsify who email is from, as learned by Kilbride in United States v. Kilbride? If you know of an interesting fact from another recently created article, then please suggest it on the Did you know? talk page. |
—HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 01:22, 12 March 2011 (UTC)
Hi Brad - I am signed up as the first reviewer on your article, sorry for taking a while to get around to it. I will be making some changes to it, and figured I would send you a couple other pieces of feedback about it:
- The article could badly use additional reliable secondary sources. Right now it's written almost everything in it is cited to primary sources, which is less than ideal.
- I would remove the paragraph that starts 'for example' under the 'injunctive relief' subheading and replace it with something sourced to a secondary source.
- Since we're aiming for an encyclopedia article aimed at the general public and not a paper aimed at people who are already completely familiar with law, the level of jargon should probably be toned down, and more stuff explaining it's historical background and what it is included.