User talk:Bnchow
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Hello! I'm practicing leaving a message on your Talk page! Dodarm (talk) 17:45, 20 December 2018 (UTC)
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:06, 2 January 2019 (UTC)
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[edit]- I like that you included a bit of history regarding “juvenile hypothalamosis syndrome”.
- I would be hesitant to say that there are “three types of FHA” or “causes”, I think that you could instead say that it is multifactorial with links to stress, weight loss, and exercise, or that these are factors that contribute to the pathophysiology of FHA.
- The last paragraph under “Stress-Related Factors” is missing a reference source.
- There are few typos/misspellings that can be corrected.
- Great comprehensive review of the effects of FHA on other organ systems.
- Overall, the article reads well. There are some places where the writing can be simplified for better readership. However there is good organization and a lot of good hyperlinks to other Wiki articles that should help the reader given the complexity of the topic.
Dodarm (talk) 17:40, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
A goat for you!
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Great collaborating with you!