User talk:Bmaclean/sandbox

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There are a few grammatical mistakes and there should be more references. Also you might want to write out people's names the first time they're mentioned. ~ Master of Chaldea (talk) 23:19, 17 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestions

First suggestion would be to avoid getting too technical in the later sections of the Host Galaxy section. This is supposed to be readable by nearly everyone, so you don't want to confuse too many people.

Secondly, an easy thing to fix on the main page would be fixing the citations and merging the "References" and "Sources" sections into one section for references.

RedHummingbird (talk) 19:30, 19 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]