User talk:Bird flock

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:11, 19 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review for Computational Chemistry

- The article effectively communicates the split operator technique in a manner accessible to a general audience

- The application section illustrates the significance and practical uses of the technique

- I like the plan to add in a portion about averaging the two split equations

- possibly add in more in-text citations? LegoMagneto (talk) 02:43, 12 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Your request for comment

First, I must congratulate you for constructing a very thorough discussion of Computational Chemistry. Your knowledge is clearly broader than mine is, or should I say was, as now at the age of 84, I have not done any computational chemistry for essentially a decade. When I was active I was mainly doing computational quantum chemistry. However, I do have some comments that might help you:-

1) Do not jump straight in. Start with a paragraph that explains why to you are writing this article.

2) "Field of Application" could be that first paragraph, or perhaps rewriting it to start more slowly, with "Field of Application" as the second paragraph.

3) Than, I suggest that your sections should be in the order 2, 4, 3, 1, 5.

I hope this helps you. Let me know if I can help further. Bduke (talk) 06:38, 23 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Brian (@Bduke),

Thank you so much for your insightful feedback! Here is our response to your comments:

You said: 1) Do not jump straight in. Start with a paragraph that explains why to you are writing this article.

Our response: This is a helpful comment but, to clarify, do you mean that we should explicitly detail how each section relates to computational chemistry?

You said: "Field of Application" could be that first paragraph, or perhaps rewriting it to start more slowly, with "Field of Application" as the second paragraph.

Our response: Do you suggest revising the first paragraph of the original Wikipedia page to better complement our version of the section?

You said: "3) Then, I suggest that your sections should be in the order 2, 4, 3, 1, 5."

Our response: For sure, we will implement this.

Sorry to bother you but we have some questions as well:

In terms of writing style and accessibility, do you think that the writing is accessible? If so how can we improve our writing style or content to make it more accessible? Are you able to understand what is going on? If not, where in the article is it unclear to you?

Any feedback is appreciated, thank you so much!

Regards

Ethan Erdabravest2001 (talk) 19:38, 23 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Your writing style is fine. The individual paragraphs are fine. I just thought that the order of them was rather odd. Go from the simple to the complex and from the general to the specific. Bduke (talk) 04:06, 24 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you @Bduke we have made changes for these in computational chemistry. Erdabravest2001 (talk) 23:50, 28 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]