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 Overall, the style of writing pretty good, it seems neutrally toned, although there are some parts in the demolition section where it seems as if you're a bit biased in favor of the parents ("...even though people where (sic) fighting against it"). Your use of sources is good, as I remember you saying you were struggling with coming up with new information. Using the Wayback Machine was a great idea. I think it may be helpful to use something like the NCES to find some statistics on Camden High
 For the nitty-gritty things, grammar, spelling, and punctuation need to be improved. Maybe copy-pasting in Google Docs or Word and running a grammar check will auto-correct things you could have missed. Despite this, I was able to understand the points you were making, and I think they were extremely relevant in the large picture of the Camden City School District, as Camden High is the namesake and crown jewel of the city. I think that there could be more links peppered in throughout the writing. 
 In terms of organization, The history section is a bit scrambled. The information is good, but perhaps you could use sub-headings to separate the different eras of Camden High's existence. Also, I am a bit confused about placement. Is this intended to be a part of the Camden's education section, or is this going to become its own page? Also, I think there is more to Camden High than just its history. I don't know if the information is out there, but consider trying to find ways Camden High has established a role in the city, such as volunteer work, or being a site for important resident meetings, things like that that would be notable. 
 Overall, you're off to a start! I look forward to seeing how Camden High's story gets filled in by your work. Meerturtle (talk) 11:22, 17 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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Information icon Hello, I'm Wikipelli. I wanted to let you know that I reverted one of your recent contributions —specifically this edit to Camden High School (New Jersey)— because it did not appear constructive. If you would like to experiment, please use the sandbox. If you have any questions, you can ask for assistance at the Help desk. Thanks. Wikipelli Talk 14:35, 29 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]