User talk:BhavishyV
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[edit]Hello, BhavishyV, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Adam and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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Peer Review-Akhil Saripella
[edit]Hello Bhavishy. First off, I would like to say that I enjoyed reading through your article as it was concise and got to the point. There was not any meaningless fluff which helped the flow of the lead section. However, there are a couple of areas in which I believe improvements could be made which would help the reader understand the Munsee language. Although your lead is concise, it is too short. I believe that adding in a few sentences about the historical distribution of the language, the people who historically spoke it, etc would help the reader gain a better insight of who this language was important to before diving into the specifics of the language itself. Also, adding in the people who want to revive the language would help provide the next steps for people interested in participating in this revitalization effort as well as bring the lead to a close. In addition, I noticed that your lead section lacked in text citations. Wikipedia says to cite wherever and whenever possible, and lead sections are no different. Lead sections need to have citations present because those citations help to establish credibility as well as prevents you from being accused of plagiarism. However, your APA formatting and citation list was very well formatted and your citations themselves were all relevant which is a great asset to your article as a whole. I would advise that we start incorporating this information into your article by creating possible sections. Some sections I would suggest you add are: Grammar, Phonology, History of the Language, Etymology, Dialects, Writing Scripts, Literature, and the Revitalization approach. In addition, I like that the statements in your lead section are based off the material in your citations, and the information is presented in a neutral complete manner. Overall, I believe that this article has great potential and I look forward to seeing what your final product looks like. Akhsar12546 (talk) 06:35, 7 April 2017 (UTC)