User talk:Bgrampp8/sandbox

Hi Britta,

I have reviewed your sandbox and I see what you wish to contribute and I think that it would help because you are correct on what the article lacks. However, I do not see your direct edits here on your sandbox? Are they on the direct talk page? -Giselle

Giselle, my direct edits have yet to be made! I have been very busy lately but am hoping to catch up on this today. Also I just commented on yours and I think I might've done something wrong; I'm having issues navigating this whole Wikipedia business. Let me know if I missed something while reviewing your work! Thanks! Bgrampp8 (talk) 16:33, 15 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Britta,

In your section about Media representation The Celluloid Closet should be italicized. Also, I agree with your point that certain sentences aren't gender neutral when they should be. Even though this article is about masculinity, it will help clarify exactly what masculinity means within certain contexts if you contrast it with how a girl's experience is. Also, try to cite more sources in your article for facts that other people left uncited (for example, the second paragraph).

- KylanKylanmalady (talk) 05:05, 21 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]