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Your submission at Articles for creation: Battle of Hashidayama (May 12)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Iwaqarhashmi was:

This submission is not adequately supported by reliable sources. Reliable sources are required so that information can be verified. If you need help with referencing, please see Referencing for beginners and Citing sources.

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Waqar💬 20:15, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Your submission at Articles for creation: Battle of Hashidayama (May 13)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Shadow311 was:

This submission is not adequately supported by reliable sources. Reliable sources are required so that information can be verified. If you need help with referencing, please see Referencing for beginners and Citing sources.

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Shadow311 (talk) 20:53, 13 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: Battle of Kinugasa Castle (May 20)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Ratnahastin was:

This submission is not adequately supported by reliable sources. Reliable sources are required so that information can be verified. If you need help with referencing, please see Referencing for beginners and Citing sources.

The comment the reviewer left was:

Please use reliable secondary sources.

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Ratnahastin (talk) 03:40, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: Battle of Hashidayama (July 28)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by AlphaBetaGamma was:

This submission is not adequately supported by reliable sources. Reliable sources are required so that information can be verified. If you need help with referencing, please see Referencing for beginners and Citing sources.

The comment the reviewer left was:

Partially seems to be a translation of the jawiki version, although there isn't any critical problems. However, there are still multiple odd problems with the redlinks of people (which seems to be a commonly introduced translation errors found in submissions), like Fujiawara no Tadamasa -> Fujiwara no Tadamasa. I'll decline the draft as there are two unsourced paragraphs, which one of them makes a claim that would probably need a citation and a possibly unaddressed "possible mistranslation" tags left in the draft. Jawiki and enwiki has different standards and slightly different policies, so unfortunately sometimes a translation just doesn't go through. I hope this comment helps in a way.

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ABG (Talk/Report any mistakes here) 13:28, 28 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: Battle of Hashidayama has been accepted

Battle of Hashidayama, which you submitted to Articles for creation, has been created.

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The article has been assessed as C-Class, which is recorded on its talk page. This is a great rating for a new article, and places it among the top 21% of accepted submissions — kudos to you! You may like to take a look at the grading scheme to see how you can improve the article.

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Utopes _{(talk / cont)} 13:57, 14 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

AfC notification: Draft:Battle of Kinugasa Castle has a new comment

I've left a comment on your Articles for Creation submission, which can be viewed at Draft:Battle of Kinugasa Castle. Thanks! Utopes _{(talk / cont)} 14:47, 14 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you so much for your help! I'll begin fixing it later once i have time. Thanks again! BeamLSB (talk) 15:31, 14 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: Battle of Kinugasa Castle (August 14)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Utopes was:

This submission reads more like an essay than an encyclopedia article. Submissions should summarise information in secondary, reliable sources and not contain opinions or original research. Please write about the topic from a neutral point of view in an encyclopedic manner.

The comment the reviewer left was:

Could be notable, but still has some editorial issues. Azuma Kagami should not be the only source for inline citations, as this has seemingly caused the page to be written like a story instead of an encyclopedia article. Two sentences which give me pause are:

"While the rest of the Miura clan abandoned the Castle, the 89-year-old Miura Yoshiaki remained behind. The Miura retainers, reluctant to leave Yoshiaki behind", - the Miura retainers did or did not abandon the castle at the beginning, if the rest did? Why are we just finding out about Yoshiaki's age? This information seems to also be partially duplicated via the excerpt taken from the Azuma Kagami just above. And, it is already a bit of a tangent, as this text is supposed to be about a battle. I'll tidy it a bit for now, but it still might need more trimming.

"On October 2nd, the army, with Toyoshima Kiyomoto and Kiyoshige, father and son, also joining Yoritomo's camp, now numbering over 30,000 elite soldiers at this point, cross the [rivers]..." - This is the section I'm not quite sure what to do with. To me it seems the chronology is getting a bit lost, as the article makes frequent cutaways to explain who is the son of the wife of who. This is the first time that either Kiyomoto or Kiyoshige are mentioned in this article, are they important to mention by name? Not sure, I'll leave that up to you.

I'd recommend doing another grammar-check because I found a good number of fixes still, and it looks like there's still a bit more to do. Almost there though! Good luck.

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Utopes _{(talk / cont)} 22:38, 14 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

(Copied from draft): Actually, I'd wager the "89-year-old Miura Yoshiaki" aspect is fixed; I just combined the important bits from each sentence, which saves some space on the page. Still unsure what to do with the chronology and organization. only the names relevant to the overarching context of the battle should be included; it is confusing to namedrop individuals who don't appear anywhere else in the text, especially without a source / wikilink / existing article to refer to. Utopes _{(talk / cont)} 22:42, 14 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for editing a few of the problems in the article, i feel like for now i dont have really much to change or add now that you've edited the biggest issues. I see the problem with Azuma Kagami being a source i used for most of this, but thats because theres only 2 (as far as i know) primary sources about this battle and one (Heike Monogatari) barely touches upon it. I did add some secondary sources to the sources section but they also mostly use the Azuma Kagami as reference. It's really difficult to find sources about this war as a whole especially these smaller battles (much less in English, thats why all my sources except the Heike Monogatari are in Japanese). BeamLSB (talk) 09:50, 15 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Can't thank you enough for all the edits you made on the page, the page looks way better and more readable now, maybe i'll resubmit it later. BeamLSB (talk) 13:52, 16 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: Battle of Kinugasa Castle has been accepted

Battle of Kinugasa Castle, which you submitted to Articles for creation, has been created.

Congratulations, and thank you for helping expand the scope of Wikipedia! We hope you will continue making quality contributions.

The article has been assessed as C-Class, which is recorded on its talk page. This is a great rating for a new article, and places it among the top 21% of accepted submissions — kudos to you! You may like to take a look at the grading scheme to see how you can improve the article.

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Thanks again, and happy editing!

Utopes _{(talk / cont)} 16:32, 17 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for reviewing this page too! I will soon begin on other Genpei War battles that arent in engwiki yet now that im done with Hashidayama and Kinugasa. BeamLSB (talk) 19:50, 17 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: Battle of Ichihara has been accepted

Battle of Ichihara, which you submitted to Articles for creation, has been created.

Congratulations, and thank you for helping expand the scope of Wikipedia! We hope you will continue making quality contributions.

The article has been assessed as C-Class, which is recorded on its talk page. This is a great rating for a new article, and places it among the top 21% of accepted submissions — kudos to you! You may like to take a look at the grading scheme to see how you can improve the article.

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Thanks again, and happy editing!

Utopes _{(talk / cont)} 22:57, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: Battle of Dulu (October 30)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reasons left by KylieTastic were:

This submission is not adequately supported by reliable sources. Reliable sources are required so that information can be verified. If you need help with referencing, please see Referencing for beginners and Citing sources.

This draft's references do not show that the subject qualifies for a Wikipedia article. In summary, the draft needs multiple published sources that are:

in-depth (not just passing mentions about the subject)
reliable
secondary
independent of the subject

Make sure you add references that meet these criteria before resubmitting. Learn about mistakes to avoid when addressing this issue. If no additional references exist, the subject is not suitable for Wikipedia.

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KylieTastic (talk) 19:39, 30 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]