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bdevea1 hey Bdevea1 (talk) 15:33, 26 January 2016 (UTC)Bdevea1

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1. The information is in a good chronological order, everything flows well. 2. Great use of outside information, it helps show you are neutral with the information you are presenting. 3. The first paragraph is really good overall, because you are giving the readers a great idea and definition of what the fourth wave of feminism is. 4. I didn’t think there was any unnecessary information or anything off-topic. All of the information comes together to discuss what the fourth wave of feminism is. 6. Be consistent with how you write “fourth wave feminism”. In some areas you have it all lower case, some Fourth is capitalized. Try to keep it all the same. Same as when you listed third wave feminism. 7. In the third paragraph, you have a misspelled word: “fpast” 8. I didn’t see any perspectives taken throughout the article. 9. I would capitalize twitter at the end of the paragraph in Impact of Technology.

Sources: 1. In the first section, “Fourth Wave of Feminism”, your citations are not linked to the page. There are just numbers, so you will need to go back and cite them like you did with the last two sections. 2. In the second paragraph, if you are wanting more citations, it may be helpful to do an internal link (if there is any) to what misogyny or sexism is. Some readers may not know and plus it will just give you another citation. 3. In the first paragraph of Impact of Technology, be sure to cite when you quoted Jessica Valenti. 4. I couldn’t tell if the last two sentences in the first paragraph of Problems with the Fourth Wave of Feminism, were with the same citations. Since you quoted her in the second to last sentence, I would include a citation there. 5. The same goes for the beginning of the second paragraph when you cite newuniversity.org. You needs to cite that quote as well. 6. Last citation is in red so you might want to check that one and fix it too.

Overall, you guys had a really good article. I didn’t feel anything was wrong with the content. It’s more of the small details. But good job!!

Porshalb (talk) 14:58, 17 March 2016 (UTC)

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-3 paragraph, end of first sentence typo (fpast) Impact of Technology: -4th sentence- Who is we?

2nd paragraph: 3rd sentence grammar error -Maybe change “Problems with…” to Criticisms of the Forth Wave…. - 1st paragraph, second sentence: quotations need citation afterwards

Feedback: - Topic choice was great. The only feedback I have is the first section “Forth Wave of Feminism” seemed a little jumpy from point to point. It kind of hit on the impact of technology but maybe those points cold be added to the impacts of technology section. - I wish I cold have written more it was just a lot to read in a short amount of time so I hope my feedback helps but overall I really enjoyed it. Alcorso (talk) 15:06, 17 March 2016 (UTC)