User talk:Bagelbites3
Hello!
[edit]This is for our AWD class, I like your username! P Bobodyne (talk) 20:03, 19 February 2016 (UTC)
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[edit]Hello, your name makes me hungry. MarineBiologistLaura (talk) 20:05, 19 February 2016 (UTC)
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[edit]Normally, your name would also make me hungry. But my sick self doesn't even want to think about food right now. Hillaryjd (talk) 18:18, 22 February 2016 (UTC)
Peer Review Round 1
[edit]Major Points I really like the language you are using in the Taxol section, it feels like a great balance of getting the information across while keeping it available to a more public audience. I do wonder about linking a couple more of your slightly higher-order words back to other WP pages, such as "Photo-Affinity Analogues" and "Tubulin". I was able to guess what they were from context but more info from at least a link seems like it would be good. One other thing would be the possibility of naming any relevant members of her "team", you mention various teams she was a part of or a head of at different points but don't seem to name anyone in particular.
Minor Points There are a couple points where it looks like you have a citation in parentheses to remind yourself to cite, just make sure to go back and include those. Some of the sentences could be restructured a bit, particularly with comma uses: "Instead, it must be given to patients in a different solubilizing substance, called Cremophor, which happens to be a low-grade substance to be present in the human system" could be reframed to be a little smoother to read.
Doriineia (talk) 18:47, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
Article Suggestions
[edit]From a systematic standpoint make article a lot shorter; I understand the necessity of using a more established scientist, Jane Goodall, for article comparison, but you can run into the issue of using too many Albert Einstein Med cited sources. Article feels like a biography tone rather than wiki article. Only include the most important details: example: "after realizing that her true calling was research" feels unnecessary in discussion. Check this notability guide for help. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Notability_(people). Also break up paragraph blocks into sections. I would change the title "recent works" to something else (maybe years 2000 - present). Overall good, but perhaps maybe too thorough. — Preceding unsigned comment added by RedMarket19 (talk • contribs) 19:00, 25 March 2016 (UTC