User talk:BC1278/cocooning

Review

This looks like a good article and I am content for you to publish it as-is. However, I do have some thoughts which you may wish to consider, or I am happy to edit here or in article namespace:

Most of the discussion and references seem to assume that cocooning is something one does at home, but the introduction doesn't even mention the home.
The "Popcorn Report" section has no citations. And have restaurant sales actually declined?
The focus on dictionary usage seems a bit defensive to me and is anyway not the primary issue in establishing WP:NEO. IMHO it would be better to drop the section.
I'm not sure that Success Intelligence counts as a reliable source.

Regards, Vectro (talk) 20:01, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Home now mentioned in intro.
Added citation to book. Rephrased one sentence to make clear that she was citing declining restaurant sales from the vantage point of her 1991 book. She cites the stats in the book. But I think it's outside the scope of this article to figure out what happened in the 25 years since. However, I do cite the author who in his book says in 1997 she was wrong because outdoor activities had grown substantially.
Removed dictionary section. Added just a bit of it to the History.
Removed sentence about Success Intelligence, but left it as a source in the lead to support the idea that cocooning concept is used in self-help (source should be acceptable in this usage because it is used only to establish itself, not to establish other facts.)

Best, BC1278 (talk) 20:41, 17 September 2016 (UTC)BC1278[reply]

Looks good to me, deploy at will. BTW it looks like your original search queries are showing up in your Google Books links — not a problem from my perspective, but I thought you'd like to know. Vectro (talk)