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Hkim856 (talk) 14:29, 19 October 2018 (UTC) It looks like you're still working on this article. As a reader, I would be curious about how this particular phenomenon has been "adopted" in packaging a few Kpop groups that you've named. Would you be able to source this information? Since you haven't backed the idea ("Bands that have adopted this phenomenon are TVXQ, SHINee, and Super Junior"), it might sound like your own interpretation. Sun Jung's work on "soft masculinity" can be a good reference. Likewise, the "hybridized" examples need more support -- perhaps you could compare each group's niche? otherwise, it won't be clear to readers.
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[edit]Geonsoo.kim (talk) 22:50, 27 October 2018 (UTC) Interesting topic. I think the appearance of Kkonminam shows the men's standard of beauty in South Korea. It would be interesting if you add the general standard of Kkonminam in different timelines.
Harrykim0306 (talk) 23:21, 27 October 2018 (UTC)
I think the topic itself is really interesting too! However, it looks like further explanation on some of the concepts on your article is required. For example, how the bands like TVXQ, SHINee and Super Junior have adopted the kkonminam phenomenon? What does the Kawaii means and how is it hybridized with kkonminam concept in terms of these bands? I am very sure that this article would be really valuable one if only some parts are revised and added. Furthermore, it would be great if you can add some visual materials on the article to let readers understand your idea easily. Keep going on!
Yujin's peer review I think your work is unique and creative! Korean boy bands is great example to know and explain about K-pop. I suggest you could improve your work by adding what difficulties Korean boy bands have had. Also, you could mention what kind of factor is popular to worldwide fans and audience about Korean boy bands. Great work!
Pamela-Peer Review- For the first section "Fan reception" I would recommend adding more to that or maybe combining the two sections together, and from there you can talk about how these groups adopt this phenomenon through one or two examples. Overall the article look great and interesting.I hadn't read about this phenomenon before. — Preceding unsigned comment added by PamelaMalasi (talk • contribs) 23:05, 7 November 2018 (UTC)