User talk:Atampir

This user is a student editor in Texas_AM/Technical_Editing_(Spring_2019) .

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12 Years a Slave (score) -- Yes, this would work. You'd essentially be writing out the encyclopedic narrative that should go with those quotations. You may or may not end up with a far shorter article depending on how you do this.

StarKid Productions -- the reliability of the sources is not the sole issue (and that's a bit of a tough one in itself). There's problems with how this page is set up. We'd want to compare it to other pages of production companies that are more appropriate and rework the whole article accordingly. But, yes, its do-able.

Bandstand (musical) - the problem here is that this article reads more like a repository of information than an encyclopedia article. The info looks like it's mostly there but you'd have to do some writing out to make it work.

MySims - has a similar issue to the above but once you actually got cutting, you'd find that what it needs to be appropriate for WIkipedia is more information added.

Galavant - This one might be more or less difficult. It needs a bit of tweaking to fit the somewhat standard TV show format and then from there, there are still a few tasks that are apparent. Others may come up later. So it might work if you'd prefer it over the others. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Etherfire (talk • contribs) 22:10, 19 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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Hello, Atampir, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:15, 22 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Table Troubles

Hello! I am currently trying to edit the table found under StarKid Productions#Soundtrack albums, and am having trouble completely taking out the "Peak Chart Positions" section. I have gotten very close on User:Atampir/sandbox3, but am not sure how to complete the deletion of the last column. Any help would be appreciated! Atampir (talk) 22:44, 7 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Atampir: Looks like the problem was that the "rowspan=2" part was left in the header row cells (because they had to cover the two rows in the "Peak Position Chart" you were trying to remove. Also, some extraneous code was left in from part of that second row. You can see what I removed here. Hope that helps! ···日本穣 · 投稿 · Talk to Nihonjoe · Join WP Japan! 23:41, 7 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Nihonjoe! I've copied this to the student's page just in case they didn't see it on my user page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:16, 8 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Response

Hi! With StarKid Productions, it looks like there was an issue with tone at one point. It looks like there's still somewhat of an issue with tone. Tone issues can come about as a result of subjective wording and sentences that are aimed at making the article topic look better without really imparting anything of major importance.

For example, the sentence " StarKid uses social media for distribution, to make their productions accessible to a worldwide audience." is a sentence that should be re-tooled. The important part is that they use social media for distribution, however the second part isn't since that's sort of a given. I'd re-tool this as just "StarKid distributes their productions via social media." The article also uses the phrase "original content" (or some variation thereof) quite a bit, which is kind of unnecessary. Since it was stated in the lead, it's kind of a given that this is what they release. Using it after this can be seen as someone just trying to gussy up the article to make the content look more impressive. Other things to look out for are subjective and promotional phrases like "successful". Even the word "funny" is subjective, so it should be avoided unless it's being used as part of a direct quote or attributed statement from someone.

I hope this helps! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:13, 15 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]