User talk:As!28
Welcome!
[edit]Hello, As!28, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Adam and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
I hope you enjoy editing here. If you haven't already done so, please check out the student training library, which introduces you to editing and Wikipedia's core principles. You may also want to check out the Teahouse, a community of Wikipedia editors dedicated to helping new users. Below are some resources to help you get started editing.
Handouts
|
|---|
Additional Resources
|
|
If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 23:59, 8 September 2016 (UTC)
You have an overdue training assignment.
[edit]Please complete the assigned training modules. --Pmmwiki (talk) 22:23, 25 September 2016 (UTC)
Welcome!
[edit]
Hello, As!28, and welcome to Wikipedia! Thank you for your contributions. I hope you are enjoying editing and want to continue. Some useful pages to visit are:
- The five pillars of Wikipedia
- Contributing to Wikipedia
- Tutorial
- How to edit a page and How to develop articles
- How to create your first article (using the Article Wizard if you wish)
- Simplified Manual of Style
- Wikipedia Teahouse (a user-friendly help forum)
- The Wikipedia Adventure (a fun game-like tour to help get you oriented within Wikipedia)
You can sign your messages on talk pages using four tildes (~~~~); this will automatically insert your username and the date.
If you need any help, check out Wikipedia:Questions, ask me on my talk page, or ask your question on this page and then place {{Help me}} before the question. We're so glad you're here! 7&6=thirteen (☎)
Peer Review
[edit]Hey Ari! I'm the peer reviewer of your article, and I just got done reading it - I think it's really good! I'm just going to critique it in order, because that makes the most sense to me, so here it goes. (Some of this may be kind of nitpicky, so I'm sorry for that - I've been on Wikipedia for a while, so some things just tend to jump out at me as an editor))
- "Cuisine" in the title shouldn't be capitalized
- I think "general food" is a kind of weird descriptor. Just food works fine, I think!
- Saying Chile is "very rich" in this sense kind of lacks neutrality; maybe just say that its food reflects its history without the modifier?
- New header for economics section
- No need to define GDP - perhaps you could link to the article about GDP instead? (And perhaps to the article about the Chilean economy, too?)
- Again, "staggering" lacks neutrality.
- Does it export all that food because of the $16 billion per year, or is it the other way around? I'm really asking - the other way just makes more sense to me. If it's not the other way around, perhaps that sentence could be worded better.
- Is the bit about language and culture being the reason why South American food is so similar sourced, or is that a conjecture?
- Pollo, not polio (but that gave me a good laugh)
- German architecture in Chile is interesting, but probably not relevant to this article.
- Maybe get to the point a little bit quicker in the last section - you spend a lot of time talking about the shape of the country and not a lot talking about how that affects the cuisine.
- Your sources are all pretty bomb, but make sure you're linking to the actual articles, not to where you found the article. I clicked the links, and they took me to either Temple Summons or Gale Group - they should take the reader directly to the source material. Make sure you use all of them, too! I know this isn't done yet, but make sure you use all of the sources and not just the four you've cited so far!
In general:
- Only capitalize the first word of the article and of the sections and other proper nouns - don't capitalize words in between, even if they're nouns, verbs, adverbs, or adjectives.
- Check your spelling and grammar. Some run on sentences, one improper use of "their," and some other issues that I'm sure you'll find yourself when you read the article again. :)
On the whole, though, this is a really good framework for a really informative article. Your sections make sense, most of the information is relevant, and I already learned a lot from this article, and it's not even complete yet. Keep up the good work!
See you in class tomorrow!