User talk:Art106student/Freiburg Altarpiece
Peer-Review and Suggestions for Changes
[edit]Hello! I have a few recommendations for this article, but overall you’re doing a great job in developing the subject matter. These ideas are just reflective of my outside perspective that I think could improve the balance/flow of the article.
- The lead of the article could be shortened. Consider moving the sections “Baldung lived in Freiburg from 1512 to 1517 as he worked on the altarpiece.” and the details of the payment amount: “He received a payment of 340 Rhenish florins, with an additional 250 florins to be paid over time. He received around eighteen to twenty florins from this sum each year.”
- Consider changing and moving the “Inspiration from Albrecht Durer” subheading into its section as its own heading placed before beginning to describe the panels. You could consider renaming this section to include more context for the time so you can provide more information (like the previously mentioned sentences). If you don’t feel there is connection/relevance between these information points, maybe consider making a separate section to include more context on the Altarpiece’s conception, boosting of his career, etc.
- The section “Wings of the Altarpiece” seems unfinished and should include a source and maybe more information regarding the imagery.
- Make sure there is consistency in the spelling of the names you type (sometimes you type Dürer others Durer).
I hope this was helpful! Good luck further developing your article!