User talk:Arist821/sandbox
TA Comments:
In-text citations: It looks like in-text citations are planned but have not been formatted correctly.
Professional tone: yes
Paraphrasing real science: yes
Grammar and spelling: overall good
Links to other wiki articles: none
Score: 17/20
Peer Review:
There is a good amount of information presented. I would like to see a little more explanation or simplification, since it is jargon-heavy. For some sentences, it would be better to break them down into shorter sentences, and for others, additional commas are needed for better flow. Words like "Carbon" and "Photosynthetic" should not be capitalized.
The following is a fragment and should be rewritten: "Particularly on the action of a Mn4O5Ca complex involved in the water splitting process, being able to determine the interactions of each substrate and all of the transition states within that part of the photosynthetic process."
I would also like to see the page organized and formatted a bit more for better clarity.
SAHAGUN, JENINE Peer Review Score: 20/20
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