User talk:Arciss/sandbox

In the Importance section the entire first paragraph has no citations.Starwarrior1221 (talk) 17:04, 22 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Headings

I think that having the heading Rosales above the lead section is unnecessary as the entire article is about Rosales and this is already known.Starwarrior1221 (talk) 17:07, 22 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I took this out because it was a format thing, thank you! Arciss (talk) 16:44, 26 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Distribution subtopic

The last sentence of this subtopic is repetitive about the way that pollination occurs. It says in this way multiple times.Starwarrior1221 (talk) 17:14, 22 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the note. I went back and made the sentence make more sense. Arciss (talk) 16:44, 26 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

The last sentence in the subsection titled "Distribution" is a little confusing. I would maybe end the sentence after "pollinate". The lead section goes in depth about Rosales, instead of giving a summary. I would maybe place some of this information under the subsections instead of in the lead. For example the long list of well-known members of Rosales could be placed in a section of its own. There is a typo in the subsection titled "Importance". It states that "It also is an important part if wildlife diets" but I believe it should say "of". Under the "importance" subsection, it seems that the whole section is pulled from the same source. I would try to find an additional source to make the topic seem more credible. Besides from these minor details, the article is well written and the sources are used well. AEMMM15 (talk) 17:06, 24 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

thank you for the editing suggestions. I reviewed the last sentence in distribution and I made it less confusing. I didn't change the introduction only because I don't know where that information could go. I also looked at other articles related to plants and the Rosales and they had some of the same information in the introduction. I also fixed the typo, thank you for pointing that out. I also added more sources into the paragraph. Arciss (talk) 16:43, 26 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]