User talk:Apendiala/sandbox

TA Comments:

In-text citations: yes

Professional tone: yes

Paraphrasing real science: yes

Grammar and spelling: overall good

Links to other wiki articles: none

Score: 18/20

Peer Review:

After reading the article, I feel like I know a lot of personal details about William. L. Jorgensen. These details include his birthplace, main career highlights and his awards. However, I think the article could be slightly improved by elaborating on the actual details of his work. You made some fantastic comments about his work on CNDO and NNDO but then you didn't explain it. I understand that you are writing a biography but I think a little bit of added detail about his main work would be really helpful. An example where you incorporated extra detail was in his work on retro-synthetic analysis. This was of great interest to me and I was able to further explore the specific area due to the inserted reference. I enjoyed reading the article. Harryslade97 (talk) 07:25, 23 November 2016 (UTC) Harry[reply]

SLADE, HENRY Peer Review Score: 20/20