User talk:Anthpulido/sandbox

Hi Anthony,

First, I do not have many edits as I'm sure you will be adding a lot more to this draft. However, I think you are off to a good start. Great job with the box on the left! It is an effective visual, providing information to different levels of viewers. It helps those who want specific identifiers as well as those who just want to visualize the compound(?) and know its chemical name. I also was able to understand your article even though I know nothing about chemistry. While I had to utilize some of your links, you explained things clearly and concisely. This is not always easy to do when dealing with complex, hard science concepts.

I recommend adding on to your explanations and placing them in context. This will help the reader place CML and glycotoxins in the real world and understand their roles and interactions. For example, you mention CML is reversible and has high heat stability. Why is it reversible? Why is this important? Why do certain foods inhibit it and how exactly do they contribute to diseases? Providing more information will add context and help the reader to better understand your article.

Overall, this article has great potential as it is well-worded and audience appropriate. It would benefit from adding context and much more substance to all sections. JuliaD123 (talk) 02:48, 6 April 2015 (UTC)

To: Anthony Pulido CC: Cecelia Musselman Date: April 6, 2015

Anthony's Unit 3 is about two different subjects, N(6)-Carboxymethyllysine (CML) and Glycotoxins. CML is an advanced glycation endproduct used as a marker for food analyisis. He breaks his article up into a mechanism of action section, effects, and its relation to food. He also has a drug box. The Glycotoxin article is very short and still needs sections but its about a metabolic byproduct that contributes to oxidative stress

This seems a very rough draft because it needs a lot of work but it's definitely a solid start. Staring with the drugbox I would make sure that all the links are functional and have proper references. I know its annoying I'm working on it myself as well. Make sure that all of the references are properly formatted and have links to the their articles. For the mechanism of action section, make sure its informative to both the common reader and in depth enough that scientists can get a lot out of it. I like first part on CML and think its very interesting but its obvious it needs a lot more work. Its hard to review the second part on glycotoxins but I understnad it well enough and adding all of the links to other wikipedia pages definitely helps, so make sure both articles do this well. Also make sure to add more sources because now you only have three. Overall its a good start to an article and I look forward to reading it when its finished.

In terms of simple mechanics the article could use some cleaning up. Make sure the [cardiovascular disease]] has full [[]], that the site boxes don't have spaces before them, and the "herbs, . Garlic, " is corrected.

Iaindrew92 (talk) 13:48, 6 April 2015 (UTC)iaindrew92 Iain Drew