User talk:Amh2015/sandbox

Very good! I think you've added the most important things to this article, and that it makes this useful when it wasn't in its existing form. Well done. SarahEMC2 (talk) 12:39, 16 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestions

Hi, Amh2015. I've made some edits to your draft. It looks like a solid improvement to the existing article. I would recommend two things:

Now that you've added all this cool content to the article, take a look at the introduction. An introduction (often called a "lede" or "lead", borrowing terminology from newspapers) to a wikipedia article should serve as an executive summary of the contents. For an article like this, a single sentence intro is ok, but the current intro doesn't summarize her educational career or her views on education. you know those are important, because you just added them, but a casual reader should get some signal of that as well. I normally recommend writing the introduction after the remainder of the content, so you've got that out of the way already.
Do any of the methods listed in the Education Views section have wikipedia articles? Would it help to link the reader to those methods or other topics in the history of Deaf education so we have some context?

You can also comb through for typos and errors (principle/principal), but overall I think this looks quite nice. I'm looking forward to seeing it added to the article! Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:53, 17 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]