User talk:Aletheia2718/sandbox

Feedback

Hi Aletheia2718. Some feedback on your draft

References go after punctuation, not before, so they should be .^[1] not ^[1].
For the most part, you should only use quotation marks for quotes. When you quotes around "event" and "background" you're saying to the reader "I'm not using this in the standard fashion", but you aren't telling them how you are using them. It's much more helpful to either link to an article that explains this usage, or include a parenthetical explanation.
The second paragraph is a bit to "what was done" when the average reader is more likely to be interested what was found, or what the point was. Also references to "the latest tools" is vague. State of the art in 2015 is likely to age quickly - if you're going to talk about it (and that's a call you need to make), talk about specifics. Linking can be a good way to avoid spending too much effort writing about these tools.
Also, in general, link more. Anything that the average reader is likely to be unfamiliar with should be linked (the first time it appears in the article), so readers can learn more. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:23, 15 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for these very helpful suggestions which I have tried to implement. Aletheia2718 (talk) 16:00, 1 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]