User talk:Akalanki
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[edit]Hello, Akalanki, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 12:34, 31 August 2017 (UTC)
Feedback
[edit]Hi Akalanki. Really nice start on your draft. You've built something quite substantial. My main concern is that it's very one-sided, and Wikipedia articles are supposed to be written from a neutral point of view. For example, you write
To ensure a path of sustainable economic growth and mitigate the threat of climate change, the Government of India decided to extend its cooperation to the United Nations Framework Convention on Climate Change (UNFCCC)
A statement like this imputes a motive - that the Government of India acted "to ensure a path to sustainable economic growth..." That's a "why" statement, not a "what" statement, which is difficult. You can describe the statement motivation of the Government of India, but if you do that you need to make it clear that it's what they said. The other problem with that statement is your source - the source you used, the UNFCCC page - says nothing about India. The reference at the end of a sentence needs to point to a source that supports the statement made in the sentence. Similarly, your second sentence has a source that does not support the preceding statement (
Prime Minister’s Council on Climate Change launched the National Action Plan on Climate Change (NAPCC)
), while the remainder of the second sentence and the entirety of the third has no supporting citations.
You need to ensure that you describe what sources say, not simply linking to other web pages.
The second problem is that Wikipedia articles are supposed to be based primarily on independent, third-party sources. While you can use government websites for supporting information or to support basic statements about policy, the majority of your sourcing needs to come from independent third parties. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:24, 9 October 2017 (UTC)
Response to feeback
[edit]Hi Ian Thanks for the valuable feedback. I have made the changes as recommended by you.