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Afm814 Peer Review by Emma Dornan

Lead Section: I agree that the existing lead section includes most of the information that is should. Perhaps you could give a couple of examples of specific species that exhibit the hawk/goose effect or examples of species it has been tested in.

Section on Direction of movement: This concept is explained well, I would suggest including the image from the original stub article. The visual is helpful in understanding the model that Tinbergen used.

I think that the sections on the research supporting innate vs. learned behaviour could be split into sub-sections to make them more straightforward.

In the "A brief history pointing to innate behaviour" section maybe you could have a couple of different sub-sections for each scientist/ researcher. For example, a section on Goethe's research, then a section on Lorenz/Tinbergen, then a section on Moore and Mueller.

In the "a brief history pointing to learned behaviour" section you could also have sub-sections. 1. McNiven 2. Schleits. I think a bit more detail on the research that supports learned behaviour would be good.

The controversy section is good!

I would include a few sentences for a conclusion. Just to tie together everything and explain what the current theory is behind the hawk/goose effect.

Emmadornan (talk) 17:59, 18 March 2018 (UTC)Emmadornan