User talk:Aamleshi/sandbox

Review Notes: The source links at the end are functional but try to include in-line citations, particularly for the definitions and equations. The definitions are very useful and readers might benefit from moving them to a section prior to the overview so that a casual reader can more easily follow. The article tone sounds neutral. I am left with the question where is HCL used? Is it strictly JavaScript or is it used on computer screens too? I didn't notice any grammar mistakes. :) CaldDalA (talk) 18:07, 6 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Really interesting article - I think the topic sounds pretty cool! I do have a few suggestions though in terms of formatting:

Color-making attributes sounds a bit awkward, maybe consider rephrasing? Attributes of color formation/projection/[something]?

Also, maybe consider rewording, “Nonetheless, it is worth reviewing those definitions before leaping into the derivation of our models,” because it sounds a bit biased in the language used.

Citation for the quote under “Hue” and other subsections?

I do think it would be helpful to restructure the portion after the attributes as well so that it flows more easily – it sounds almost disconnected and jumping from one to another once it gets to “Brightness and colorfulness are absolute measures[…].”

Stormy Ruiz — Preceding unsigned comment added by Stormyruiz (talk • contribs) 00:49, 8 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]