User talk:68Sashanet85/sandbox
Hi, my name is Riley O'Dell. Your lead section is solid, however, there are a few grammar errors that can be fixed.
In the first paragraph, introducing your language, your second sentence "With fewer than 60,000 speakers recorded in 1997, and the Asam 2001 Census reporting a literacy rate of 81% the Kachari language is currently ranked as threatened," can be shortened. It currently is in the passive voice. Also, the literacy rate is not necessary for this sentence and can be included in another sentence. This will compress the sentence and help it be read more easily, not tripping up the reader. The emphasis should be on the language being threatened.
In the second paragraph, "While there are still living adult speakers, many of children are not learning Kachari," the "of" after "many" should be removed.
In the Syntax area, in the second sentence, "For example, the word for "boy", is really the combination", the "really" is unnecessary. It should look like "the word for "boy, is the combination."
There are some Wikipedia coding for the table at the end of Syntax. I am not too familiar if tables can be created in sandbox or not. However, I would look it over because there is colspan and rowspan and other formatting in the paragraph, making it difficult to read.
The first sentence in Adjectives is a run-on. I would add a period where the comma is and start another sentence with "though it gains the case ending if it follows the noun, rather than precedes it. ". There should also be a comma after "gains the case ending."
The first sentence of Morphology is also a run-on. Try to break up the different thoughts into separate sentences. I would add a period where the comma is in "While common nouns, such as father, mother, brother or sister have distinct masculine and feminine words, ". I would also remove the "while" at the beginning. I would then start a new sentence, "Other nouns, including animals, typically have the words...".
Your sources are all reliable. You have neutral content, and a clear balanced structure. Keep up the good work, I can't wait to see the finished page!
______________ Hi, My name is Rounak Nischal. I looked over your article and thought it was made really well. In fact, you took your time to look more in depth to the language and its syntax, grammar, and actual characteristics which is impressive. However, maybe you could use some more general language information and help the reader really understand the language you are talking about. I don't know too much about this area, their environment, culture, etc., and that would be a good stepping stone to really understand why their language is what it is. I also formatted some of the headings and subheadings since it wasn't very consistent throughout the page. Feel free to change it back, I just thought consistency to reading a Wikipedia article is very important as you want it to be well organized and clean to attract readers. "Gender - While common nouns such as father, mother, brother or sister have distinct masculine and feminine words, most others, including animals, will typically have the words for male and female, -jelá and -jeu respectively, added on as a suffix to denote gender. Other common masculine and feminine suffix forms that may be used include -zǎlá/-zǔ, -bundā/-bundi, -bóndá/-bóndi, -phántá/-phánti and -pherá/-pheri. " This is one of the sentences I thought to be a little more of a run on and thought could use some rephrasing. I went ahead and broke it down a bit like taking out "while" from the beginning and made it flow better. Just keep these things in mind throughout your article. Good work so far and I know your article will be amazing! Good luck! RounakN (talk) 18:38, 7 April 2017 (UTC)