User:Yayun Zheng/Dropping a Han Dynasty Urn (1995)/Lilybillow Peer Review
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- Dropping a Han Dynasty Urn (1995)
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I think you are off to a great start the article is neutral and contains no bias. Most of the information appears relevant and is a good general rundown of the artwork. One of the first things I noticed about the article is that there are no pictures within it, I think adding photographs would be a good addition. You could include the photographs of him dropping the urn. At the end of the process section it said that the artwork was re-created in Lego in 2015, I'm not quite sure what is meant by this, I clicked to see this image and I'm not sure if this was an artwork created by the original artist of the dropping of the urn, You might want to clarify that. If it isn't created by the original artist it may not be relevant information. If it is created by the artist specify why it was made. when I tried clicking on the second source which i believe is the Met museum source it said that the URL isn't valid, so make sure that you are able to obtain the correct URL. Your first source seems to be auction information about the photographs, It appears to be a good source but I am not sure if it has been reviewed by multiple people, try to include more sources that have been reviewed. I am also not sure where you are getting the information that the urns are worth a million dollars. I don't think I saw that on the auction page, try to clarify where you got that information. Your grammar appeared good overall.