User:VinyaminLobch

Bio

About me

My interest's are making games and programs (currently still learning). I also don't mind reading from tome to time, currently one of my favorite authors is Michael Crichton. Michel has written many books, however I personally believe Jurassic park is one of his best. Its about a zoo full of dinosaurs cloned by means of a breakthrough genetic engineering technology, eventfully everything goes wrong and the humans are left to figure out how to survive and escape the island.

My Wikipedia interests

If I'm still using Wikipedia in the future, I probably wouldn't be doing much but using it to do general research. I may or may not edit articles that I might feel strongly about.

Article evaluation

I'm the type of person that loves to know how things work and why. This is probably why technology has always been a favorite topic of mine. I love knowing how computers work and everything about them. One of the biggest things that fascinate me is how they store data, so I visited the Disk storage article on Wikipedia and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: its occasional grammar errors, the lack of citations, and its lack of information.

Grammar

Overall the article was good with spelling and following proper grammar rules. The only issue I noticed was occasional missing commas and a couple of hyphens. Words like "inner-most", were written without the hyphen, and I counted at least five instances where a comma should have been used. Like the sentence, "Similarly, the first video disc," was written without the comma.

Citations

Although there are citations in the article, as you read further down, they begin to be less frequent. Under the "Access methods," header I counted only five citations, all of which were in the first three paragraphs. The last two did not have a single one. As a result, things like "...sent from the computer processor to the BIOS..." did not cite any additional articles. At least adding a link to an article about BIOS would have been great. Additionally, there was only one singular reference to an external source which was last revised in 2013.

Lack of Info

I already knew most of what was mentioned in the article. That's why I was surprised when they failed to talk about a few things that I find way too fascinating not to bring up. Like, the use of thermal expansion on the head of the needle in hard drives to get is as close as five NANO MEETERS from the disk, or how scientists figured out they could fit more data onto disks by changing the direction of recording from longitudinal to vertical. Even as much as briefly mentioning and citing it to a separate article would have been desirable.

Summary

All in all, there's nothing too wrong with the article, and I would say this article is perfectly fine if you were looking to grab a fact or two for some personal enrichment. However, I would not think of using it as a source if I had to write a paper on the topic. Most of the information seemed like a brief overview, and some points weren't even brought up. If I wanted to learn more than a simple outline I would have to look somewhere else.