User:Uniquajanae

Save the Plastic Bag Coalition

This article is targeting readers who want to know more about the California court case challenging the Manhattan Beach. Readers may not know much about the case at all, so the article needs to be informative enough to allow people with little to no knowledge to be able to follow along easily. The purpose of the article is to inform the reader of what the court case is, why there was a need for it, what the challenges were, what the goals were and what the outcome was. Overall, the necessary information is provided in the article, but the structure and order of the article needs to be reworked so that it is easier to read, follow and understand.

There hasn’t been too many edits to this recently. The last major edits done seem to be in 2012 and has barely been touch since, except by one or two people who added in minor edits. The structure of the article has not been edited in a few years.

The first big problem I noticed with the article is the Lead. There isn’t too much information provided there. I plan on editing this section to provide more context into what the article will be about. The introduction and background section doesn’t give too much background information either. Some of the information in this section needs to go in the lead section, such as the date it occurred. The party section seems to be subsections of the background information. I think this section needs to be moved or reorganized to help with the flow. The industry summary section seems to get into the background information we were missing in the introduction and background section. There are also controversial topics on the research provided in one section. I will try to embed this information within the text in the appropriate sections. Lastly, the issues section only poses questions and no answers. I think this could work better if it were under the same section and the rulings. Here, it could be explained how or if these issues were ever addressed.

Aerobic Exercise

This article is targeting people who want to know more about aerobic exercise. Information like what it is, what all it entails, the benefits, and the drawbacks is all necessary information for this piece. All of this information is already provided in the article. My main focus will be to help with reorganizing the page to help with the flow of information and the ease of reading.

There seem to be a lot of recent edits to this article, even some a recent as a couple a days ago. The past edits have helped to improve the article by adding in information where needed and clearing up confusion.

The biggest problem with the article is the structure of it. Some of the section titles do not fully cover what the section is about. There are big chunks of texts that could work better if they were broken up into smaller sections. For example, the benefits section also has information about the drawbacks of aerobic exercise. This is not necessarily a benefit, therefore, it does not belong in this particular section. Making a section specifically for this could work. All of the provided sections need restructuring, but the three biggest pieces, the Lead, the benefits and the Aerobic versus anaerobic exercise sections will definitely need to be broken up to make the text easier to follow.