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==notes==
[edit]OVERSHOOT (week 5):
Each reference is appropriate and reliable. Majority of the things are relevant to the topic. Some of the terminology was difficult to understand, but that was probably because I don't have a strong environmental background in terminology. I did think having the sentences about the book (Overshoot: The Ecological Basis of Revolutionary Change) was a little unnecessary. The article is neutral in the sense that it only presents the problem and no other opinions. Overshoot is a scary topic that is hard to avoid but needs to be talked about. The sources I checked were neutral and only presented facts. If there were any opinions stated in the sources, the editor didn't include them.
In the 'overshoot' essay, I added: The environment usually has mechanisms in place to prevent overshoot. For example, plants are only able to regenerate and regrow a few times after being consumed before completely dying off.[1]
[edit]FOOD DESERTS (week 6)
(under beyond physical access)
Some have brought up the ideology that suggests the food deserts cause low income families to have poor diets. But, as research is now showing, income may be playing a bigger role on determining the eating habits of families living in food deserts. [2]
FIRSTBORN (week 9)
The tricky thing about this wikipedia article is the fact that a lot of the information seems to come from certain studies. I understand that there is a lot of information coming from a few sources, but I do believe that the article was under cited for the type of information it was presenting. The information that is present is relevant to the topic and helps the reader get a better understanding. My only suggestion, as mentioned before, would to be to take out the "read more:" sections and just put information from those websites into the actual article.
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(all in the talk section)
OVERCONSUMPTION (week 11)
Recent grassroots movements have been coming up with creative ways to decrease the amount of goods we consume. The FreeCycle Network is a network of people in one's community that are willing to trade goods for other goods or services. It is a new take on thrifting while still being beneficial to both parties. [3]
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- ^ schreef, Nathan Surendran (2014-12-01). "Humans in ecological overshoot: Collapse now to avoid a larger catastrophe". The Seneca Effect. Retrieved 2017-05-16.
- ^ Cortright, Joe. "Are Food Deserts to Blame for America's Poor Eating Habits?". The Atlantic. Retrieved 2017-05-16.
- ^ "The Freecycle Network". www.freecycle.org. Retrieved 2017-05-18.