User:SuperSadSushi
Bio
[edit]About me:
[edit]Welcome to my homepage, thank you for visiting.
I am currently studying to become a computer scientist in hopes of furthering both my personal enjoyment of the subject, as well as establish a career path in the field. In my free time, conversely to the popular stereotype, I enjoy playing sports and generally moving my body. Specifically, volleyball is one of my favorite pastimes, and directly tied to that, training in the gym. If I have the time, blacksmithing is a newer hobby I've picked up in the recent year, and am currently working on a few projects I hope to complete by later this year.
My Wikipedia Interests:
[edit]Attached to my hobbies, my Wikipedia interests closely mirror one another. I currently have no intentions on forging a page of my own, but I have enjoyed browsing pages such as Volleyball, Blacksmithing and of course, Computer science and Computer security.
Article Analysis
[edit]Tally Hall as been a long standing favorite band of mine for years now, and as such, I want to ensure that the Wikipedia page for Tally Hall is the best and most accurate it can be. With the band having been on extended hiatus now, I believe that it is important to review the information on the Wikipedia page and evaluate it's overall correctness/quality. I visited the Tally Hall article on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: citations, layout, and completeness.
Citations
[edit]When reviewing the citations for the page, a reoccurring issue made itself present in the form of lackluster substantiated claims. This poses an issue for the validity of the page, and can be quickly remedied by beginning to link articles outside of Wikipedia. Many of the claims on the page are correct, but requires outside research from the user rather than having the respective sources cited directly on the page.
Layout
[edit]As a smaller scope issue, the layout of the page leaves a lot to be desired. Several large topics are grouped into one section, leaving enormous walls of text to read at a time. Breaking the larger topics into more condensed sub-sections would increase readability, as well as allow more in-depth writing/analysis of specific topics. Additionally, the page noticeably lacks photographic or artistic additions, something that would help a user visualize the topics mentioned in the article.
Completeness
[edit]Lastly, the Tally Hall page has a large focus on the respective pasts of the individual band members, rather than focusing on the band itself. The implementation of this in itself is not an issue, however, the topic often eclipses other points being mentioned in the article, and as such, should either be moved to a section of their own, or be excluded from other parts of the article.
Conclusion
[edit]Overall, the Tally Hall Wikipedia page is far from perfection, but also quite distant from irredeemable. A lot of the suggested fixes above would be relatively quick patches, and do not generally detract from the page as a work in itself. Ensuring that statements are properly cited, as well as fixing some formatting issues would benefit this article greatly.