User:Seastandbymeblackeye/Daisy Jones & The Six (book)/Star457 Peer Review
General info
[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing?
Seastandbymeblackeye
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Seastandbymeblackeye/Daisy_Jones_%26_The_Six_%28book%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Evaluate the drafted changes
[edit]Nice work on this draft! Here are a my recommendations:
- Add a section about the author of the book. A quick overview of who they are, why they wrote the book, etc...
- I do think putting in a cast would be helpful since they are talked about throughout your plot summary.
- There are some parts of the plot summary that don't make sense to someone who knows nothing about the book. For example, the part about Daisy breaking into her parents home and getting arrested seems to come out of nowhere and there's no backstory or further explanation to expand. I would suggest keeping the plot as an overview and relatively generic unless you want to go much more into detail about the entirety.
- I appreciated the plot structure section as I was originally confused on why the plot was grouped together by years.
- This sentence "Daisy continues to use pills, and Billy writes a song about her, makes her sing it." in your section about Aurora could use some work in terms of sentence structure.
Overall, great work! I really enjoyed reading about Daisy Jones & The Six and think you're off to a great start.