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Lara Mussell Savage Final Draft
[edit]Lead Section
[edit]Lara Mussell Savage is a two time world champion in Ultimate (sport), earning a gold medal in both 2000 and 2004, as well as bronze medals in 1998 and 2008. Leading up 2010, Lara was a part of the Vancouver Organizing Committee (VANOC) as Project Manager for Aboriginal Sport and Youth, and helped run the Air Canada PGA Tour[1]. Adding to her resume, in 2015 Lara became an ambassador for viaSport’s Gender Equity #LevelTheField campaign promoting gender equity in sport[2][3] and became a Trustee for the British Columbia (BC) Sports Hall of Fame & Museum. Lara is also a member and elected Councillor of Skwah First Nation, and was awarded the Tom Longboat Award as Canada’s Female Aboriginal Athlete of the Year in 2005.[4]
Lara was raised on the Skwah First Nation territory in Chilliwack[5][2] and completed her bachelors degree at the University of British Columbia. Since her retirement from ultimate in 2008, Lara has continued to be an active advocate for aboriginal athletics[2]. Lara currently resides in Chilliwack, BC, on the Skwah Reserve, with her husband and two children[5].
Personal Life
[edit]Mussell was raised in the Skwah First Nation of Stόlō territory in Chilliwack, British Columbia[2][5][6]. As an amateur athlete she competed in several sports such as track & field, golf, basketball, curling, gymnastics, and ultimate. Laura graduated from the University of British Columbia as a Wesbrook Scholar with a degree in Human Kinetics, Leisure & Sport Management. Lara's grandmother was the first female Chief of Skwah First Nation, elected in 1959, and her cousin, Kaila Mussell, was the first professional female saddle-bronc rider in North America[7][3].
Career
[edit]Lara was first exposed to ultimate in her Grade 12 year of high school (1992). Post graduation Lara and her classmates entered a team in the Vancouver Ultimate League and later went on the play for the University of British Columbia varsity-club team, during her post secondary education. In 1997, Lara took the next step in her career by joining a national team that played in both American and Canadian tournaments. In 1998, her team went on to win the national club championship, earning the chance to represent Canada at the World Championship in Minnesota[8]. She went on to help Canada achieve a bronze medal in 1998, and a gold medal in 2000. As one of the national team captains, Lara lead the undefeated team to their second gold medal in 2004[7]. She went on to win a bronze medal once more in 2008[1][2][8].
After her 2008 season Lara required neck surgery, which eventually ended her athletic career [1]. Since retirement she has been involved with the 2010 Winter Olympics in Vancouver[7], serving on the organizing committee (VANOC) as Project Manager for Aboriginal Sport and Youth[1]. Lara has helped run the Air Canada PGA TOUR Championship in British Columbia, and has also been employed by the University of British Columbia in their athletics department[1]. She has been a part of the Activity Partners Council and Chef de Mission for the Aboriginal Team BC[1] and has become an ambassador for ViaSport’s #LeveltheField campaign promoting gender equity in sport[1][2]. Lara currently sits on the board trustees for the BC Sports Hall of Fame[7] and was recently featured in the Women in Sport Spotlight, ViaSport BC’s monthly series featuring inspirational female athletes, coaches, officials, volunteers, and leaders in British Columbia[2].
Ultimate World Championship Results
[edit]| Year | Medal |
|---|---|
| 1998 | Bronze |
| 2000 | Gold |
| 2004 | Gold |
| 2008 | Bronze |
Lara Mussell Savage First Draft
[edit]Lead Section
[edit]- Lara Mussell Savage is a two time world champion in Ultimate (sport), earning a gold medal in both 2000 and 2004, as well as bronze medals in 1998 and 2008. Leading up 2010, Lara was apart of the organizing committee (VANOC) as Project Manager for Aboriginal Sport and Youth, and helped run the Air Canada PGA Tour[9]. Adding to her resume, in 2015 Lara become an ambassador for viaSport’s Gender Equity #LevelTheField campaign promoting gender equity in sport[10][11] and became a Trustee for the BC Sports Hall of Fame & Museum. Lara is also a member and elected Councillor of Skwah First Nation, and was awarded the Tom Longboat Award as Canada’s Female Aboriginal Athlete of the Year in 2005.[12]
- Lara was raised on the Skwah First Nation territory in Chilliwack[13][10]. She completed her bachelors degree at the University of British Columbia in Kinesiology (Sport Management). Since her retirement from ultimate in 2008, Lara had continued to be an active advocate for aboriginal athletics[10]. Lara currently resides in Chilliwack, BC, on the Skwah Reserve, with her husband and two children[13].
Early Life
[edit]Career
[edit]Honours and Awards
[edit]Lara Mussell Savage Ideas
[edit]- Categories: Early Life, Career, Honours and Awards
Links as a source for content for the page...
http://www.theprogress.com/sports/397964931.html
http://www.ammsa.com/node/28286
http://www.chilliwacktimes.com/sports/360103231.html
http://chilliwacksportshalloffame.com/portfolio-items/lara-mussell-savage/ (photo)
Thoughts to Enhance Wiki page
[edit]The third and 57th, 97th reference within your citations are dead links and leads to an error page. See notes below. I also think that within your references, you should look to cite information that is publicly available to read. Just for further reserach purposes. I think when you are discussing the terminology, in terminology section, it is important to again hyperlink the terminology to the respective wiki page. This will help the reader if they are looking for additional information within the specific terminology without having to leave the section. The term pejorative is hyperlinked twice, both in the into and terminology,each time to a different Wiki page. For consistency, I would refrain from using multiple wiki pages hyperlink in relation to one word, it confusing the reader. They will be able to know by clicking on pejorative, that is used to describe a racist or derogatory word, rather than also hyperlinking it to the Racism page. When referring to the giant beaver when discussing the Pleistocene mammals, I think it would be beneficial to list in brackets the two potential names for the Giant beaver. Currently this links you to a page that has no information regarding the giant beaver other than two potential options that it may refer to. Or for fact sake, eliminate it completely from the wiki page. When discussing the Inuits within the Post-Archaic periods in the history section it may also be beneficial to add information about the Thule People. I noticed that you had mentioned it, but I believe that it would be beneficial to hyperlink this to the Thule people Wiki page. I also agree with some of the below comments, stating that this page it too lengthy. Trying to summarize key points and utilizing hyperlinks can be an affective way of scaling down this extremely informative page. SRacinsky (talk) 20:32, 2 February 2017 (UTC)
Notes
[edit](3) "Inuit Circumpolar Council (Canada)-ICC Charter". Inuit Circumpolar Council > ICC Charter and By-laws > ICC Charter. 2007. Retrieved September 18, 2009. (57) "Canadian Human Rights Commission :: Resources :: Frequently Asked Questions :: About Employment Equity". Canadian Human Rights Commission. Government of Canada. August 27, 2009. Retrieved September 18, 2009. (97) "Singer Tom Jackson pitches housing complex for Winnipeg". Canada: CBC. October 23, 2009. Retrieved January 27, 2011. SRacinsky (talk) 20:11, 2 February 2017 (UTC)
Feedback on Wiki Draft - Adam
[edit]- Hi Sarah, your page looks great so far, I have some feedback for you.
In your lead section you mentioned VANOC, as the reader I am not sure what that is? I would recommend spelling it out first followed by the abbreviation. Same with BC - British Colombia Sports Hall of Fame & Museum.
You did an excellent job staying neutral throughout. The content is great and the facts are well supported by references
I like the hyper links you made as well, it helps the reader to make connections if they are unsure of what it means.
Just thinking about a possible Results heading. Perhaps recapping all the medals she won, in what year, at what medal. Similar to my Olympic Results heading. Great job Sarah, this is fantastic, Lara Mussell will be so proud of you! AdamDangelo (talk) 21:44, 20 March 2017 (UTC)
Thank you for your feedback Adam ! Changes have been made and a Results Sections has been added. SRacinsky (talk) 16:19, 21 March 2017 (UTC)
- ^ a b c d e f g Welsh, Eric. "Lara Mussell a hall of famer on and off the field - Chilliwack News". Chilliwack Progress. Retrieved 2017-02-14.
- ^ a b c d e f g Laychak, Greg (Dec 2, 2015 at 12:00 PM). "Jock Scraps: Chilliwack sports news". http://www.chilliwacktimes.com/.
{{cite web}}: Check date values in:|date=(help); External link in|website= - ^ a b "#LEVELTHEFIELD Ambassador: Lara Mussell Savage | viaSport". www.viasport.ca. Retrieved 2017-02-14.
- ^ Welsh, Eric (Oct 21, 2016 at 2:00 PM). "Lara Mussell a hall of famer on and off the field". http://www.theprogress.com/.
{{cite web}}: Check date values in:|date=(help); External link in|website= - ^ a b c Unknown, Unknown (n.d.). "Our Team". http://aboriginalsportbc.ca/.
{{cite web}}: External link in|website= - ^ Motivate Canada (n.d.). "Lara Mussell Savage" (PDF). http://www.motivatecanada.ca.
{{cite web}}: External link in|website= - ^ a b c d "Chilliwack Sports Hall of Fame – Hall of Fame reveals class of 2016". chilliwacksportshalloffame.com. Retrieved 2017-03-06.
- ^ a b "Chilliwack Sports Hall of Fame – Lara Mussell Savage". chilliwacksportshalloffame.com. Retrieved 2017-03-06.
- ^ Welsh, Eric. "Lara Mussell a hall of famer on and off the field - Chilliwack News". Chilliwack Progress. Retrieved 2017-02-14.
- ^ a b c Laychak, Greg (Dec 2, 2015 at 12:00 PM). "Jock Scraps: Chilliwack sports news". http://www.chilliwacktimes.com/.
{{cite web}}: Check date values in:|date=(help); External link in|website= - ^ "#LEVELTHEFIELD Ambassador: Lara Mussell Savage | viaSport". www.viasport.ca. Retrieved 2017-02-14.
- ^ Welsh, Eric (Oct 21, 2016 at 2:00 PM). "Lara Mussell a hall of famer on and off the field". http://www.theprogress.com/.
{{cite web}}: Check date values in:|date=(help); External link in|website= - ^ a b Unknown, Unknown (n.d.). "Our Team". http://aboriginalsportbc.ca/.
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