User:Porkhash808/Perdicella helena/Kaytie.conselva Peer Review
General info
[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing?
Porkhash8o8
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:Porkhash808/Perdicella helena
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Perdicella helena
Evaluate the drafted changes
[edit]Please answer the following questions in detail addressed to the classmate whose article you are reviewing. Remember this is constructive feedback, so be polite and clear in your suggestions for improving their article. We are all working together to improve the Wikipedia pages for species native to Hawaii and for the World to meet.
Use a different font style (bold or italic) for your answers so it is easy for the author to see your comments!
- First, what does the article do well? (Think about content, structure, complementing the existing article, writing, etc.)
- One thing that the article composer did god was having a good amount of information being presented into their 3 categories on their page. I really like how easy it was to comprehend the sentences
- Check the main points of the article:
- The main points of the article is that it explains it's classification, distribution, environment, and description. In these sub-categories of the wikipedia page, there is a lot of really good broad information that explains the living environments and the distribution of these species.
- Check the sources:
- After reviewing the page, I do see that almost every sub-category within the page contains some type of reference. However, one thing that the author could improve on, is to format each source in either APA or MLA format in a better way. I would suggest using a sources generator to better the chances of citing sources correctly.
- Give some suggestions on how to improve the article (think of anything that could be explained in more details or with more clarity or any issues addressed in the questions above):
- One way that the author could improve is to decrease the font size of the paragraphs. I believe that they are the size of "heading" which explains why the font is partially bolded and quite big. To make it easier on the reader's eyes, I would suggest to make it "body" size.
- Another thing that I would suggest to do is to write a starting lead which plays a role of being a small overview for the entire page. I noticed that it was missing, and I think that it is very important to have on the wikipedia article.
- What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? The most important thing to improve for this article is to include a starting lead in the beginning.
- Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? One thing that I can takeaway from this article for my own is to use and site a variety of sources because I only used one or 2 sources in my paragraphs, but I think that I should incorporate other information as well.
Comments:
Aloha! Thank you for your comments. I like how you were able to give me some quality feedback and getting inspiration to improve your own writing. My next moves will be to fix the heading and format and adding more details.
-Hector Manayan