User:Noienoah/1977 NBA All-Star Game/JLR02 Peer Review

Peer review

Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects:

Lead

Guiding questions:

Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content

Guiding questions:

Is the content added relevant to the topic?
Is the content added up-to-date?
Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

Is the content added neutral?
Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Sources and References

Guiding questions:

Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)
Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
Are the sources current?
Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)
Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization

Guiding questions:

Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
Are images well-captioned?
Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only

If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.

Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions

Guiding questions:

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
What are the strengths of the content added?
How can the content added be improved?

Examples of good feedback

A good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.

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Additional Resources

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General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

Noienoah

Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Noienoah/1977 NBA All-Star Game
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): 1977 NBA All-Star Game

Evaluate the drafted changes

Lead - The information you added is helpful in giving an overview of the game. As someone who knows basically nothing about basketball, your new lead tells me a lot more about why this game was notable than the old stub. One concern is that you have not added any sources. Where did you find the information to add it here? If you just knew it already (impressive), try finding a newspaper article, ESPN report, or a similar credible source that backs you up.

Content - The content that is here is good! I like that your lead covers why the game was notable beyond just the basic stats. I think your article could be stronger by adding some more prose about the game itself - was there any drama about roster selection, the NBA-ABA merger, during the game itself, etc? I know a lot more about baseball than basketball, but I think the article about the 2010 MLB ASG is a good example of prose. You could also flesh out the article by adding some information about why this game was relevant after the fact. Was it a notable player's first or last all star game? Were any records set or broken? This could also be a place to find some more sources to back up your article.

Tone/Balance - You're doing a good job at keeping a neutral/unbiased tone in the article. I don't really have any issues here; you'll want to maintain this tone as you add more content to the article.

Sources/References - The main issue here is that you haven't added any! The information you've added to the lead seems solid, but there are no citations to support it. In fact, to me it looks like no sources at all have been added to this article since 2008. This means you have a lot of room to improve upon what's already there. Luckily, it should be pretty straightforward to find information on this - Kaylea has made some good suggestions like searching sports history e-books or newspaper archives. You might also try ESPN, Sports Illustrated, or similar sports-focused publications.

Organization - Like other sections, what you already have is good but could be made stronger with some additions. I think the lead is solid, but this article feels like it's lacking some more content that is prose and not just tables with names and numbers. You could add sections about the game itself, any relevant aftermath/legacy, or other categories you think are relevant. Also, I did make a couple copy-edits in your lead section - these are just my ideas, though. It's your article!

Images/Media - There aren't any images on the page currently. However, you obviously can't time travel and take photos that are your personal work, so I'm not sure how difficult it would be to find media you'd be allowed to use. Maybe things like game logos, jersey designs, etc could be found somewhere under public license? I will admit I don't know much about this though.

Overall - You've got a solid start! For example, the information you have added has a good tone that is appropriate for an encyclopedic article. You could make it stronger by adding some sources to back up this information and some additional prose (writing) relevant to the game. What you've already added is on the right track though. Keep it up and add some sources and you will be good to go.