User:Nnhie

My full name is Dang Thi Tuyet Nhi. I am an Vietnamese girl who was born in Ho Chi Minh city in 2001. I have been studying abroad for one year; and American is not my final destination. In my free time, I regularly listen to music, read books and watch some movies. I like Indie music best since it makes me relaxed, stress-free and very peaceful. Mystery book is my favorite one because it is so attractive; I never can stop reading it because of its detective stories.

Wikipedia is one of my study materials. I frequently use it as a base for my research or my study. The parts which I am interested in on this website are related to Biology, Chemistry and History. Moreover, I love Biology and Chemistry; therefore, I choose Nursing for my major. I am interested in learning about the human body. I can spend hours on only reading materials related to the human body.

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Article evaluation

I visited the  “Von Iva “ page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: structures, citations, and grammar.

In the first aspect-structures, they have only two sentences for the introduction. It is so short and does not have enough basic information for the readers to get to know about this band. Moreover, in “contents”, almost its parts are not described in details. For instance, in “members”, there are only their names and their positions; there does not have any information else about their members such as their age or their background.

For citations-the second aspect, in “tour”, “television”, and “post-Von Iva” parts of the “contents”, there is no citation to prove the information. Moreover, in external links, the link Curl Girls appearance Logo Channel, Jun 2007 of “Video” is dead. (404 Found). In addition, the link  "Von Iva: 'Girls on Film'". San Francisco Examiner, Troup, Christina (2008-12-04) of “References” is not related with the article since the page is about the music band while the link is about the soccer player band. I think they need to improve those by citing with the appropriate or reliable sources or removing those.

In the last aspect-grammar, the sentence “The band has since broken up, as the relationship between the three became more tense.” has grammar errors. Therefore, this sentence needs to be improved. For example, it can be changed to “The band broke up because their relationship became strained.”