User:Mumpsoffun
Space Food (Audience/Purpose/Focus of Editor)
[edit]The most likely audience for the Space Food article is people interested in space as an overall concept. This can be researchers for science fair experiments, collectors, hobbyists, or NASA employees. However it is important to consider that some chefs may be looking for information about freeze-dried food, or somebody is looking to partake in space food for the novelty. Most of the history of the article was focused around building content for the topic, rather than editing to Wikipedia’s standards. It needs some slight copyediting and more up-to-date content, as the article has not been edited in several years. I think the Space Food article fits the standards of Wikipedia’s Food and Drink category, and it also pairs nicely with the In-flight Meals article, which I looked at to help model the “flow-of-information.”
I think I should reorganize the sections of the article to facilitate natural and easy reading. The article needs several copy edits and consistency of style. It is easy to tell where different people have edited different parts of the article, so I will do some smaller touch ups there to make the article seem like a consolidated piece.
Space Food Sandbox Edits
[edit]Magic 8-Ball (Audience/Purpose/Focus of Editor)
[edit]Most people looking at the Magic 8-Ball article probably already know about it and are interested in the origins of the toy. By its nature it appeals to most people, the old and young. Male and female, etc. It can also be classified as a divination tool, so mystics, psychics and the sort may be wondering about its “divine powers.” Other than that, the only other group of interested parties I can think of are toy manufacturers. The article’s purpose is to simply inform the reader about the usage of the toy and its origins. I think the sections don’t stray far from this purpose.
We definitely need some copy editing. The Pop Culture references should be organized, and the sections in the article need to facilitate a natural flow of information. I will also rearrange some sentence structuring to make the article more readable.
This user is a student editor in Texas_AM/Technical_and_Professional_Editing_(Fall_2020). |