User:Miranda/University of Kentucky
What is a good article?
[edit]- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS):
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references):
(some not properly cited) b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- a (fair representation): b (all significant views): (see "Top 20")
- a (fair representation):
- It is stable.
- It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
- a (tagged and captioned): b (lack of images does not in itself exclude GA): N/A c (non-free images have fair use rationales):
- a (tagged and captioned):
- Overall:
- a Pass/Fail:
- a Pass/Fail:
General Comments for University of Kentucky
[edit]- Citations. "blah.<ref=x>," not "blah. <ref=x>,"
- Avoid using "it".
- Ital. magazines like U.S. News & World Report
- No hyphen in "Top 20" (see Wikipedia:MOS#Hyphens)
- Years aren't wikilinked per MOS
Post Analysis Review
[edit]- Issue addressed
- Issue not addressed
- Neutral
Lead
[edit]- Issue not addressed miranda 03:03, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
The lead is well developed from last time. However, Still has some issues, mainly due to prose.
- "a graduate school" - what graduate school are you talking about?
- Who's the "Olympic medalist in track and field"?
- The university undergraduate program currently ranks 122nd,[10] and there are numerous programs and colleges that are currently in the top-20 rankings.
- Random: The 859 area code, placed in effect for central Kentucky on October 1, 2000, is a mnemonic that spells out "UKY," short for the University of Kentucky.[12] (OR)
- The lead to this section needs to be 2 or 3 paragraphs, per WP:LEAD.
- Lead needs to include more information (i.e. conference, student life, rankings, sports, etc.)
- 16 colleges, a graduate school, 93 undergraduate programs, 99 master's degrees, 66 programs in Ph.D.'s and doctoral degrees, and four professional programs. (see Academics and demographics, too)
- Is there one main campus or subcampuses located elsewhere in KY?
- Any major sports championships?
The university is home to 16 colleges, a graduate school, 93 undergraduate programs, 99 master programs, 66 programs in Ph.D.'s and doctoral degrees, and four professional programs.[5] Fiftteen campus libraries exist on the University of Kentucky's campus.
- Graduate program in what?
- Fiftteen is a word? miranda 04:39, 11 January 2008 (UTC)
History
[edit]- Issue not addressed miranda 03:11, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
Most of the paragraph still lacks in prose and seems choppy. There is still a gap b/n 1970 and 1990. You may want to separate the history up for future reviews. You shouldn't link to non-existant articles, unless they will be made in the immediate future. Below are some examples:
- Three years later, James Kennedy Patterson became the first president of the land-grant university and the first degree was awarded. In 1876, the university began to offer Master's degree programs. Two years later, A&M separated from Kentucky University, which is now Transylvania University. [6] For the new school, Lexington donated a 52 acre (210,000 m²) park and fair ground, which became the core of UK's present campus. [6] A&M was initially a male-only institution, but began to admit women in 1880.[4]
- No space after period for cite.
- Might have to specify years.
- "A&M was initially a male-only institution, but began to admit women in 1880.[4]" should be in the beginning of the article
- Three years later, the college expanded with the formation of the Agricultural Experiment Station, which provided research results to farmers throughout the state, addressing issues relating to agribusiness, food processing, nutrition, water and soil resources and the environment.[13] - external link.
- Residents had to cross a swampy depression, where the student center now resides, to reach central campus. [4] Four years later, the school's name was changed to the "State University, Lexington, Kentucky" upon reaching university status, and then to the "University of Kentucky" in 1916.[4]
- No space after period for cite. Last sentence is a run-on
- Not clear:
- Five years later, the College of Medicine and College of Nursing opened, followed by the College of Dentistry in 1962.[14]
Prose is weak and broken. Needs transitions. miranda 01:43, 11 January 2008 (UTC)
- The college was initially for men only, but women were admitted beginning in 1880, with the Belle Gunn being the first female degree recipient in 1888.
- The school's first women's dormitory, Patterson Hall, constructed in 1904, was the first building constructed apart from the main campus
- run-on, and not clear
- residents had to cross a swamp, where the Student Center now resides, to reach central campus.
- (student center doesn't need to be capitalized)
- which swamp did they have to cross? Also, this needs to be cited.
On February 15, 1882, the Administration Building was dedicated, the first building completed on the present campus.[9] It was the first of three to be constructed.
- I copyedited this sentence. What are the other two names of the buildings?
- Three years later, the Agricultural Experiment Station was formed.
- What is the agricultural experience station and what does the site provide?
- Prose is horrible in this section.
- it became a model for the federally mandated programs that were required beginning in 1914.
- What is "it"?
- decapitalize "graduate school"
- take out italics of buildings
- In 1912, the Graduate School opened, offering degrees of Master of Arts, Master of Science, Civil Engineer, Mechanical Engineer, Mining Engineer and Doctor of Philosophy.[9]
- "the University of Kentucky's graduate school opened offering bachelor's, master's and doctoral degrees relating to x, y, and z."
- Six years later, the university's three engineering schools were consolidated into one.
- What schools were they named before they were consolodated?
- Four years later, the university awarded its first doctoral degree. [10]
- I think this should be taken out. Who was the person's name? What subject matter. IMHO, this is too trivial.
- The University of Kentucky became racially integrated in 1949 when Lyman T. Johnson, an African American, won a lawsuit to be admitted to the graduate program.[4]
- Was this effected by the civil rights movement or Brown v. BOE? What spurred this?
- You skipped almost 30 years of the university's history.
- Dabbed. There is almost nothing notable about the 1980s, outside of routine president shift. Seicer (talk) (contribs) 18:13, 11 January 2008 (UTC)
- Nearby Lexington Community College, despite the 1997 reorganization of the community colleges, remained integrated with the university
itself - Hyperlink land grant
- last paragraph is not cited.
Controversies
[edit]- Neutral miranda 04:46, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
- Both bills
werenever passed.
- Cite/copyedit
- On June 18, the "Sponsored Benefits Plan", an amended plan that eliminates the conflict with the definition of marriage in the Kentucky Constitution, took effect on July 1. The revised plan uses no state appropriated funds.[28]
- Syntax.
miranda 04:46, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
- Don't ital. "domestic partner benefits committee" or "Top-20" or "Family Trust Foundation" or "Senate Bill 152" or "Sponsored Benefits Plan"
- It was slated to go into effect July 1, and the university would become the second public college in the state to offer such benefits,[16] however, Kentucky Attorney General Greg Stumbo, stated on June 1, 2007, that the package violates the constitutional definition of marriage.[24]
- Run-on
- It was also opposed by Republican Stan Lee, who filed a bill to ban domestic partner coverage at Kentucky's public universities,[21] and by Republican Vernie McGaha,
- Are these state officials? Are these senators or congressmen?
- Hyperlink "July 1, 2007"
- "This plan uses no Commonwealth of Kentucky appropriated funds.[25]"
- Does not read right...
- This plan is not funded by the Commonwealth of Kentucky?
Campus
[edit]- Issue not addressed miranda 03:21, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
Expand: The College of Engineering currently operates a satellite campus in Paducah, located on the campus of West Kentucky Community and Technical College.[30] Cite': The network of community colleges is now known as the Kentucky Community and Technical College System (KCTCS). Adjoining Lexington Community College, despite the reorganization of the community colleges, remained integrated with the university, but separated from the University of Kentucky in 2004 and became a part of KCTCS.
- The University of Kentucky is home to numerous notable structures, such as Main Building, the oldest remaining building on campus, and Patterson Office Tower, the tallest.
- No EL to the POT.
- "the tallest" in the what?
Rankings
[edit]- Neutral miranda 04:06, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
Issues: The university also ranks 19th in the nation among public research universities based upon the level of faculty scholarly activity, according to the 2005 Faculty Scholarly Activity Index.[11]
- This is already in the lead. Can you expand on this fact?
The College of Law is the only graduate school at UK included in U.S. News & World Report's graduate school rankings,and its ranking is 60th.[37]
- Syntax
- by some measures the university already has top-20 programs in:
- Kind of an opinion.
- This doesn't need to be ital.: "Preventive Medicine and Environmental Health" or "Martin School of Public Policy and Administration,"
- This definitely needs to be re-worded.
- The 2005 Faculty Scholarly Activity Index ranked UK as a whole 19th in the nation among public research universities based on the scholarly activity of faculty.
- The Princeton Review ranks UK 20th in the category "Professors Make Themselves Scarce" and 4th in the category "Teaching Assistants Teach Too Many Upper-Level Courses," indicating a poor level of undergraduate instruction at the university despite the achievements implied by the more favorable Faculty Scholarly Activity Index rankings.[34]
- I do not understand this sentence.
Research and endowment
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Issue not addressed miranda 03:35, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
- Prior endowments were $538.4 million in 2005 and $195.1 million in 1997, the rapid increases partially attributed to the "Top 20" Plan.[1]
- Run-on
- Currently, the William T. Young libraries book endowment is the largest among public universities in the United States.[2]
- With how many books/funding?
- The university currently has an endowment of $831.8 million, as of 2007.[1] Prior endowments were $538.4 million in 2005 and $195.1 million in 1997, the rapid increases partially attributed to the "Top 20 Plan".[35]
- Should be in "Top 20".
- The William T. Young Library's book endowment is the largest among public universities in the United States.[13]
Top 20
[edit]- Issue not addressed miranda 03:57, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
Syntax problems:
- As a result, fewer citizens live in poverty and as a result, fewer public dollars are spent on health care.[9] The plan would also spur technological advancements due to university-based research and increase the marketability of the state to investors.
- Cite last sentence. Double word usage.
- It passed that goal and the effort was raised to $1 billion. In March 2007, $1.022 billion was raised, months before the fundraising effort was set to end.[41]
- You never mentioned the deadline.
- According to the Statewide Facilities Condition Assessment Report released on April 4, 2007, the University needs $12.5 billion to complete the 1997 mandate to become a "Top 20" institution.[42]
- Stand alone sentence, which should be integrated earlier in the article.
- Don't ital. "Top 20", "Compact," "The Campaign for the University of Kentucky" (also don't capitalize compact)
- Please avoid using "it"
- Also, what are the cons against this plan?
- None were really listed. I've dug through some Herald-Leader articles and can't find any opposition. Of course there are those that do oppose it, such as those in Fine Arts, due to the funding restrictions placed upon their college and other non-research oriented colleges. I hear about this all the time as a current student, but there are no reliable citations for that. Seicer (talk) (contribs) 15:09, 8 January 2008 (UTC)
Traditions
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Issue addressed miranda 05:17, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
- May need to be incorporated to the history section.
- Also, this is too trivial.
Sports
[edit]- Issue not addressed Some words in section is copied from the lead. In the article you want to expand upon the lead. miranda 04:01, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
During his tenure, he lead the Kentucky Wildcats to four NCAA championships in 1948, 1949, 1951 and 1958.[7] The Wildcats later won a fifth championship under Joe B. Hall in 1978, another in 1996 under Rick Pitino and its last under Orlando "Tubby" Smith in 1998.[7]
The university also boasts a cross country national championship, eight championships in gymnastics, an Olympic medalist in track and field, and 15 national championships in cheerleading.[8]
- Basketball needs to be separated from football (a paragraph on basketball and a paragraph on football)
- How about women's sports?
- There is no need to detail out individual sports given that it is detailed out on the subpage. Seicer (talk) (contribs) 18:16, 11 January 2008 (UTC)
Student life
[edit]- Issue not addressed miranda 03:58, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
- Unreferenced. Are there clubs on campus, political affiliations? Were the students of the university a part of any political or social protests? What are the ethnic, racial, and gender make-ups of this campus?
- Greek life needs to be bigger and immediately follow student life.
Greek life
[edit]- Neutral miranda 03:31, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
The section was expanded. However, there were external links. Also, some of the syntax was not clear. I have fixed this. miranda 03:26, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
- Short section. What conferences (NPHC, NPC, etc.) are at this university?
Media
[edit]- Issue not addressed miranda 05:34, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
- The operations started on October 17, 1940, as WBKY...
- In 1971, the station was one of the first to carry NPR's "All Things Considered" and helped debut National Public Radio, changing its call letters to WUKY in 1989 to better reflect its affiliation with the university.
- Run-on
- Choppy sentences
- You didn't ital. the paper from below: Kentucky Kernel
- The Electrical and Computer Engineering Department was the home and sponsor of one of the earliest college amateur radio stations in the United States. W4JP began continuous operation before World War I and persisted until amateur radio licenses were granted by the US Government.
- Tried to merge. The prose needs to be re-written.
- Prose needs to be re-written
- The campus is also served by the Kentucky Kernel
- It only changed its call letters to WUKY in 1989 to better reflect its affiliation with the university.
- Re-worded, needs to be...
Famous Alumni
[edit]- Issue not addressed Mainly due to the plagiarism. miranda 05:08, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
- I have renamed this section to "alumni"
- It also claims Ken Lucas, a former U.S. representative from the commonwealth's fourth congressional district, current U.S. Senator Mitch McConnell,
- syntax
- "an automobile dealer executive and donor of the largest gift ever to the university"
- >Banking and automobile dealer executive and donor of the largest gift ever to the University of Kentucky and for whom the College of Business and Economics was renamed
- Cite #54 is not properly formed (space). When I press #54, I get #53.
- Rename to alumni
- Might want to have an introduction sentence for this paragraph. For example, "Famous students from UK have made advances in x, y, and z. Some of them include..."
- Isn't there an alumni foundation or association?
- Renamed to Noted people per WP:UNI and added information regarding the alumni association and some notable people. Seicer (talk) (contribs) 16:46, 11 January 2008 (UTC)
- On some GA articles, like Florida State University, Alumni is used. Also, not all alumni are noted people. miranda 05:08, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
Citations
[edit]- Neutral miranda 03:39, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
- I don't understand refs 12-15; 17-19.
- Herald-Leader on 37 and 44; Kentucky Kernel on 28
- 34 to 36 are not sourced properly
- 30-33 - Magazines need to be italicized.
- Some other citations are not formated properly. miranda 01:43, 11 January 2008 (UTC)
- Can you provide the revised #s for the improperly formatted citations? The only ones I can remotely think of are in the Controversies section, whereas the newspaper is italised. That is the fault of Template:Citation, which is better suited for newspapers with page numbers for offline access. Online access to those articles is impossible given that they are on NewsBank's archives, which is a pay service. Seicer (talk) (contribs) 02:07, 11 January 2008 (UTC)
- number 1 is and others with newspapers. You need to ital. papers with <i>Name of Paper</i>. miranda 04:21, 11 January 2008 (UTC)
Links
[edit]- Issue addressed miranda 03:30, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
- What are the University Project Sites? You did not establish what this was before in the article's history.
- Removed per WP:EL: Most were not needed or were spam, and all can be accessed easily through UK's web-site. Seicer (talk) (contribs) 02:27, 11 January 2008 (UTC)
Additional Refs
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Not done miranda 03:28, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
- Go to Google books or local library to gain additional references for this article.
Preliminary Decision
[edit]This article is on hold until Jan. 11th. Not done reviewing, but (see below). The article needs major improvements. miranda 10:56, 4 January 2008 (UTC)
- I have extended this a day (Jan. 12). miranda 06:54, 7 January 2008 (UTC)
Comments
[edit]Post-Analysis
[edit]So much work was invested into making this article to be improved to GA status. I appreciate the hard efforts. However, issues still remain such as prose, manual of style, syntax of sentences, et. cetera. Thus, I can't pass this article as a GA. I suggest you to the LOC should help you along with other sources. miranda 07:29, 12 January 2008 (UTC)