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Hi, I wasn't able to access the talk page associated with your Wikipedia article, so I will write my peer review here. I made a few grammatical adjustments directly onto the live Wikipedia article. Overall, your article is really interesting and well-constructed. There is a good structure and flow to the different sections.

A few suggestions are to shorten simplify some of your sentences overall. There are several run-on sentences, especially in the "Interactions" section, which make the ideas hard to follow. For example, the first sentence of the "interactions" section is unclear what you are trying to say.

In the "early life" section, I am not sure which President you are referencing.

I also think that we aren't allowed to use direct quotes in Wikipedia, only paraphrasing. You only quote directly in two places, so maybe adjust those to paraphrasing the content.

Overall, great job!

~Anita