User:Joeymontagne

Bio

About me

I am a student and musician from Washington state. I play multiple instruments but only play cello and bass in a formal environment. I play video games, I go hiking on occasion, and I have four pets (3 cats, 1 dog). Dogs and cats are two very common pets.

My Wikipedia interests

My interests relating to Wikipedia have so far been limited to a reader. I have not had any reason to make edits in the past, yet if I were to begin writing/editing I would search for articles or lack there of that pertain to my interests and fix the existing ones and create new ones.

Article Evaluation

I've had an interest in lists, Syria, and cheese for a long while, so when I saw that the Wikipedia list of Syrian cheeses article was in dire need of help I decided to take this role on myself. I visited Wikipedia's list of Syrian cheeses, an found three aspects of it worth commenting on: its overall lack of polish, its reliance on a single source, and missing important information.

Lack of Polish

The article has a relative sense of quality for about half of its length until it begins to fall into a more bare bones and lackluster section with improper writing standards. Some of these sections have no capital letters, punctuation, and go from 5-10 words long. Some sections are missing pictures and descriptions.

Reliance on a Single Source

This article has a small spread of sources with a single one appearing in nearly every single section, with the others seemingly thrown in to pad out the lack of sources. Most Wikipedia articles use numerous relevant sources throughout, but this one has a small amount of inconsequential sources and one that is relied on too heavily.

Missing information and over abundance of information

A large amount of information that would be useful to add to the article is missing, such as recipes that utilize these cheeses, and certain sections do not mention how it is made and where it is consumed. There is also an overabundance of not notable information within this article, such as when one sentence explains that the word türkmen is not describing the ethnic affiliation. It also describes the taste of the cheeses without citing a source that back up those claims.

Conclusion

When looking at it as a whole the article is about half good and half bad. It opens strongly with some solid information but begins to slowly unravel as it goes on. It has a solid foundation, but the over reliance on that one source makes it difficult to say if its accurate or not. There is also information that is missing that would be very useful, and in some sections there is irrelevant information that makes what is written somewhat incoherent.