User:Jamie4086

My name is Joohee Kim (1999~current) from South Korea. I'm a student who came to America to study abroad. I want to be responsible for the financial department of a major companyi. I really like to play badminton and I also like horseback riding.I'm interested in accessories, fashion, and make-up. My motto is "Don't miss out on what I want to do while doing what I have to do."

I'm especially interested in BTS as well as Korean culture in Wikipedia. I love BTS, a boy band from K-pop so there's nothing I don't know about them. Thus, I can edit or add some facts about BTS to Wikipedia.

Article Critique

I visited the Presbyterianism page on Wikipedia especially region part because I go to Presbyterian Church so I'm interested in it. But I found three aspects of it worth commenting on citations, age and completeness.

Citation and age

First, a current information is "In the 21st century, a new General Assembly of the Orthodox Presbyterian Church of Korea (Founder. Ha Seung-moo) in 2012 declared itself an authentic historical succession of Scottish Presbyterian John Knox.". However, there are two holes in this sentence. One is mistaken information. In Korea, according to Korea encyclopedia, the first orthodox Presbyterian church was occurred in 20th century. I guess the editor seems confused with the first year of Korean Presbyterian united service in 21st century. Another one is citation age problem. The article of "Orthodox Presbyterian Church of Korea (Founder. Ha Seung-moo)" is not available to see anymore and also it is related with wrong information. Thus it should be edited as a current existing article with more precise evidence that contains the history and present status of the Presbyterian Church in Korea.

Completeness

Second, a part of suggestion about overseas Korean reverend that "In addition there are many Korean-American Presbyterians in the United States, either with their own church sites or sharing space in pre-existing churches as is the case in Australia, New Zealand and even Muslim countries such as Saudi Arabia with Korean immigration." is under-represented because there are not enough information or statistics. Moreover a former sentence is linked to the process of the Korean Presbyterian association so it is important to prove the exact figure. Therefore, it would be better to add articles with precise data about Korean-American Presbyterians.

Conclusion

In conclusion, I want to make more accurate information even with small changes. Furthermore, I realized that it is a bit hard to find cites and mistakes so we should really careful when add or edit data.