User:James8854clerk/Null Infinity/PippaThePup Peer Review
Lead:
[edit]Your lead is very strong, and I feel that it conveys the general idea of the topic very well. I do feel it is a little dense, and maybe the second paragraph in your lead could be added to a separate history section.
Content:
[edit]The content of your article is up-to-date and relevant. There is not much, if any, added fluff so the article is nicely compact and easy to read. There are a couple of sections that only have a sentence or two, but since this is just a draft I'm sure that you'll be expanding those sections.
Tone and Balance:
[edit]Your article is fair and balanced, and is just really an overview of null infinity as a concept without any personal input or persuasion.
Sources and References:
[edit]All of your sources come from academia or scientifically leaning media, and they all seem to be trustworthy sources. Your article reflects what the sources say quite well, and your article is densely sited, which is good. My only advice would be to check the formatting on your reference section, as it seems like you listed them, and then were listed again once the reference templated was applied.
Organization:
[edit]Your article is well organized, and I would only recommend adding a history section if you feel it is necessary. Your image is also a great addition, and it is very useful for understanding the topic.
Overall Thoughts:
[edit]I enjoyed your article, even if the topic is a little out of my understanding. The complexity of the topic makes writing an article in a way that is easily approachable difficult, but I think you did a good job. I think that the addition of more images could be useful to a stronger understanding, but I think that you would know best if something like that would be useful.
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