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GA Review

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  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
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  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    [note]
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Issues in the article

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Infobox
  • The main image should only have a maximum width of 250px.
Lead
  • "Fightstar are" > "Fightstar is".
  • "Their lineup comprises" > "Its lineup comprises of" or "The band's lineup comprises of".
  • All instances of "their" should be changed to "its", "the band's" or "Fightstar's".
  • Address [who?]
  • The lead becomes too general and focuses on positive critical praise for the band's albums.
    • "Indeed, debut album Grand Unification (2006)" is unencylopedic wording and PEA. The indeed should be removed and the sentence should read "Fightstar's debut album, Grand Unification (2006), [...]."
    • "Scottish publication [...] 'ultimate rock debuts" seems unneccesary for the lead. The quote is also not in the source.
  • "'Best British Newcomer' and 'Best British Band'" both accolades should be in quotations, not apostrophes.
    • Only "Best British Band" accolade is mentioned in the source.
  • "... rarities titled, Alternate Endings (2008) was released." Apostrophe should be moved before "titled" and a second apostrophe after the year.
  • "The four-piece" should be changed to either "Fightstar" or "the band."
  • "which heavily featured orchestral and choral elements" needs a reference.
  • Ref #1 can be moved to the end of "The band announced an extended hiatus in 2010,".
History
  • Use en dashes (–) instead of em dashes (—) for sub-section headings.
Origins (2003—2004)
  • "During 2003" > "In 2003"
  • "He was by this stage becoming increasingly frustrated..." reads like journalism, should be reworded.
  • No need to link "diploma", "college" and "university".
  • "amplified when Fightstar announced", "amplified" could use another less ambigious term.
  • "Simpson announced to the pop trio", "pop trio" > "Busted"
  • "The next day, the 14th,", "the 14th" isn't neccessary.


Members
  • Is there a need for the "Official members" title?
  • The en dash (–) should be used instead of the em dash (—).
  • Years active (e.g. (2003–2010)) would be useful.
Awards
  • Section title should read "Awards and nominations".
  • The use of ! scope="col" and ! scope="row" tags would be useful, but it is not neccessary. See MOS:DTT.
  • rowspan="2" can be used for Kerrang! Awards.
  • Should be placed after Discography.
  • Both nominations need references.
Discography
  • Per WP:LOW and WP:WPMAG, the discography section should only include a list of works and the year of release.
References
  • Ref #1: links to page 2 of the article where the hiatus is mentioned, it should link to page 1.
  • Ref #2: Rate Your Music is not a reliable source.
  • Ref #4 and #5 are dead links.
  • Ref #8 does not include the quote in the article.
  • Ref #12 redirects to the Huffington Post.
  • Ref #14 is broken and redirects to the site's index page.
  • Ref #18 does not work.