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- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
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- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
Issues in the article
[edit]- Infobox
- The main image should only have a maximum width of 250px.
- Lead
- "Fightstar are" > "Fightstar is".
- "Their lineup comprises" > "Its lineup comprises of" or "The band's lineup comprises of".
- All instances of "their" should be changed to "its", "the band's" or "Fightstar's".
- Address [who?]
- The lead becomes too general and focuses on positive critical praise for the band's albums.
- "Indeed, debut album Grand Unification (2006)" is unencylopedic wording and PEA. The indeed should be removed and the sentence should read "Fightstar's debut album, Grand Unification (2006), [...]."
- "Scottish publication [...] 'ultimate rock debuts" seems unneccesary for the lead. The quote is also not in the source.
- "'Best British Newcomer' and 'Best British Band'" both accolades should be in quotations, not apostrophes.
- Only "Best British Band" accolade is mentioned in the source.
- "... rarities titled, Alternate Endings (2008) was released." Apostrophe should be moved before "titled" and a second apostrophe after the year.
- "The four-piece" should be changed to either "Fightstar" or "the band."
- "which heavily featured orchestral and choral elements" needs a reference.
- Ref #1 can be moved to the end of "The band announced an extended hiatus in 2010,".
- History
- Use en dashes (–) instead of em dashes (—) for sub-section headings.
- Origins (2003—2004)
- "During 2003" > "In 2003"
- "He was by this stage becoming increasingly frustrated..." reads like journalism, should be reworded.
- No need to link "diploma", "college" and "university".
- "amplified when Fightstar announced", "amplified" could use another less ambigious term.
- "Simpson announced to the pop trio", "pop trio" > "Busted"
- "The next day, the 14th,", "the 14th" isn't neccessary.
- Members
- Is there a need for the "Official members" title?
- The en dash (–) should be used instead of the em dash (—).
- Years active (e.g. (2003–2010)) would be useful.
- Awards
- Section title should read "Awards and nominations".
- The use of
! scope="col"
and! scope="row"
tags would be useful, but it is not neccessary. See MOS:DTT. rowspan="2"
can be used for Kerrang! Awards.- Should be placed after Discography.
- Both nominations need references.
- Discography
- Per WP:LOW and WP:WPMAG, the discography section should only include a list of works and the year of release.
- References
- Ref #1: links to page 2 of the article where the hiatus is mentioned, it should link to page 1.
- Ref #2: Rate Your Music is not a reliable source.
- Ref #4 and #5 are dead links.
- Ref #8 does not include the quote in the article.
- Ref #12 redirects to the Huffington Post.
- Ref #14 is broken and redirects to the site's index page.
- Ref #18 does not work.