User:Hrnlifson
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I will improve this article by providing more detail on her biography section, and the sentences are very choppy. The article does not flow very well, and I like to think that I'm a decent writer so hopefully I can improve the overall flow of the article. I will also address what compelled Schenirer to advocate for girls' education.
I will be using the following resources:
http://jwa.org/encyclopedia/article/schenirer-sarah
http://jwa.org/encyclopedia/article/bais-yaakov-schools
http://www.yivoencyclopedia.org/article.aspx/Schenirer_Sarah
Outline:
I will be keeping all the same sections that the article currently has. In the biography section, I will be getting rid of the following: When one client was unusually particular about the measurements of her dress, Schenirer wrote in her diary: "People are such perfectionists when it comes to clothing their bodies. Are they so particular when they address themselves to the needs of their soul?" [3] I don't think that this is important information that needs to be in the article. I will be adding that she came from a prominent family. There is minimal information about her death, so I'll be adding details to that as well. I will add details of her personal life as well (she was shortly engaged for a while, then married two years before her death).
In the legacy section, I will add that that there is a repository in Jerusalem in her honor. There was also an effort to restore her tombstone. I will also add how many schools there are still standing, and what her movement accomplished.
If necessary, I will explain what the Bass Ya'akov school movement was, and what it represented.