User:Giselleflores16/Maty Ezraty/Nickma22 Peer Review

Peer review

Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects:

Lead

Guiding questions:

Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content

Guiding questions:

Is the content added relevant to the topic?
Is the content added up-to-date?
Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

Is the content added neutral?
Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Sources and References

Guiding questions:

Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)
Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
Are the sources current?
Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)
Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization

Guiding questions:

Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
Are images well-captioned?
Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only

If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.

Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions

Guiding questions:

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
What are the strengths of the content added?
How can the content added be improved?

Examples of good feedback

A good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.

Peer review of "Homemaking"
Peer review of this article about a famous painting

Additional Resources

Check out the Editing Wikipedia PDF for general editing tips and suggestions.

General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

Giselleflores16

Link to draft you're reviewing: Maty Ezraty
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Maty Ezraty

Evaluate the drafted changes

(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

I think the lead is good, and provides a good overview of the article. I would recommend moving the second sentence to Early life and education, as it does repeat some of the same information. After the first sentence, I might add a sentence describing the impact of the company she founded to give a full picture of her notability. The sentence regarding her death could also be its own section at the end of the article and expanded upon if you can find more information.

Content

I think the content mentioned is all relevant and important. I added a hotlink to the YogaWorks article to allow readers to view information about Yogaworks. If you could include more information about her personal life I think it could really enhance the article. I would also recommend an infobox (Edit>Insert>Template>Infobox) to make the article look more polished and easier to skim. If possible, a picture could be added as well.

Tone and Balance

The tone is very balanced and respectful, acknowledging her contributions without advancing any sort of narrative.

Sources and References

The sources look very reputable and the links work, but it appears sources 2-4, and 11-13 are each made up of the same source. The repeated sources should be deleted since they aren't needed.

Organization

The article is well organized, although I would recommend some new sections and reorganization as the article is expanded upon. I fixed grammar in a couple places as well so I would continue to polish that aspect of the article as well.

Overall Impressions

I think this is a great start to the article, I would expand on the areas outside of the career tab, and add new sections as you build it out. I think this can definitely get to start class!