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Instructor feedback

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- edit: "Imogen in her bedchamber, where Iachimo witnesses the mole under her breast."

- cut this one, since it doesn't pertain directly to the play: Judi Dench, who played Imogen in 1980 for the Royal Shakespeare Company, and Patrick Stewart unveil a portrait of Shakespeare painted by 90 artists on April 23, 2006.

- edit: "A portrait of Franz Schubert, who composed a lied for the song "Hark, hark! the lark.""

- edit: "Image of Thomas D'Urfey, who adapted Shakespeare's Cymbeline in 1682."


Cymbeline Updated Citations (For References 70-80)

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Peer Review Implementation

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Grace: Images and Formatting

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To begin the revisions to my changes to the images and formatting of the Cymbeline page, I responded to the message posted on the article's talk page that nominated the image I posted, "Imogen versus Innogen," for deletion. In my response, I used Wikicode to write,

@Community Tech bot: Hi, I recognize the copyright issue with this picture, and it has been deleted with two other images I added on the page that may also have the same issue. Thank you for recognizing this mistake! Gdeluca33 (talk) 12:27, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

I also responded to user EugeneZelenko who brought the copyrighted images "Imogen versus Innogen" and "Hark, hark, the lark" to my attention on my own talk page. The response I gave the user goes as follows:

@EugeneZelenko: Hi, I recognize the copyright issue with "Imogen versus Innogen" and "Hark, hark, the lark," so I have deleted them from the page. Thank you for recognizing this mistake! Gdeluca33 (talk) 13:24, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

To refrain from anymore copyright problems, I deleted all of the images I uploaded from Valerie Wayne's Cymbeline, which includes "The Other Place" that was put in "Performance history" and "Hark, hark, the lark" in "Cultural references." Another image that I used that was originally from the Creative Commons for the "Screen adaptations" section, titled "Cymbeline (film)" showing Ethan Hawke's film poster, also had copyright issues. Because of this, I removed that image as well.


My edits will now include making the captions on the Cymbeline page consistent. Listed below with (according to each image's section) are the changes I am proposing in order to end each caption with a period, as some are missing punctuation. This will enhance the readability of the captions:

Summary: Imogen in her bed-chamber where Iachimo witnesses the mole under her breast. Illustrated by Wilhelm Ferdinand Souchon in 1872.

Synopsis: Posthumus and Imogen by John Faed.

Imogen Discovered in the Cave of Belarius by George Dawe.

Watercolor of Posthumus and Imogen by Henry Justice Ford.

Date and text: The first page of Cymbeline from the First Folio of Shakespeare's plays, published in 1623.

Performance history: Dame Ellen Terry as Imogen.


Next, I will propose adding new images to replace various pictures I had to delete because of copyright. I am choosing these images from the Creative Commons, meaning they will all be open source and permitted to use in the public domain. The step-by-step process of how I am adding pictures to the page is described in my Individual Implementation Plan. For reference, here is the process with the example of the image of Thomas D'Urfey that I already added with no copyright problems:

The image that I am using is already available on Creative Commons, which means I have to do the following: click "Insert," "Media," search "Thomas D'Urfey," write the caption "Photograph of Thomas D'Urfey, who adapted and made changes to Shakespeare's Cymbeline in 1682," and click "Insert."


Each image along with the corresponding caption that is proposed here is subject to peer review and feedback.


Performance history: this image will be placed on the right side of the article when the Royal Shakespeare Company's 1980 Cymbeline revival is discussed. Judi Dench, who played Imogen, unveiled this image. As she is talked about in the Wikipedia article, the image is relevant to the content it will appear next to.

Judi Dench, who played Imogen in 1980 for the Royal Shakespeare Company, and Patrick Stewart unveil a portrait of Shakespeare painted by 90 artists on April 23, 2006.


Cultural references: this image will be placed on the right side of the "Cultural references" section to replace the previously copyrighted image I added of "Hark, hark, the lark." This picture shows Franz Schubert, who voiced and played the piano for the lied 'Song' (Hark, hark, the lark) that occurs in act 2, scene 3 of Shakespeare's Cymbeline. Because the Wikipedia article talks about his work, adding a picture of Schubert is a relevant visual that gives the readers context.

A portrait of Franz Schubert who set the lied "Hark, hark! the lark" to music for the 'Song' in act 2, scene 3 in Shakespeare's Cymbeline.


Adaptations: the last image and caption that I added, as mentioned above, is of Thomas D'Urfey who adapted Cymbeline. The original image by Herbert Gustave Schmalz had no relation to the content being discussed about the different adaptations of Cymbeline and pictured Imogen drawing a sword. This picture is misplaced because the beginning of this part of the article talks about a play that was adapted from Cymbeline by Thomas D'Urfey called The Injured Princess or The Fatal Wager.[1] The article claims that in this adaptation, D’Urfey changed Imogen’s character to be named Eugenia. This is problematic because the name variation is not shown, as a picture of Imogen is placed directly next to the discussion of the different name Eugenia.[1] Because of this issue, I replaced the picture of Imogen with a picture of Thomas D'Urfey. This image is already placed on the left side of the page, which I plan to move to the right side. This is due to the fact that there will no longer be an image in the "Screen adaptations" section, as the previous picture was copyrighted on Creative Commons. The "Screen adaptations" section is already short, making it more visually appealing to only have the image of Franz Schubert appear below in "Cultural references."

Photograph of Thomas D'Urfey, who adapted Shakespeare's Cymbeline in 1682.

Halle's Peer Edits

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For our group specifically, much of the peer editing that has been done occurs in-person, or over group messaging, where we make suggestions or assist one another with certain elements of the project. Due to the fact that our roles are very technical / formatting-based (images, citations, notes, references, etc.) there are limited edits that we can actually make to each other's work. Therefore, I will outline the things that have either already been addressed, or the things that have not been completed yet by each group member. I think our most useful form of Peer Editing in this group will revolve around holding each other accountable for our work, and helping our fellow members with anything they need. Additionally, a great deal of my group's peer edits will occur after other groups have completed their portions of the project.

Grace (images/formatting): Much of the work Grace has done relates to finding relevant images for the Cymbeline Wikipedia page and ensuring that they follow all the necessary copyright requirements. She has taken many steps to make sure all of the Wikipedia rules are followed, and we can all be proactive about helping her by checking the page's edit history, and informing her if there seems to be a problem with an image.

Amelia (references): Amelia will primarily be focusing on making a user-friendly, organized References section. In this section, she will remove any excess information that currently occupies it, (like publication info. that should be saved for the Sources section) and will make sure that the hyperlinks within the page all work properly. She has also worked with me in figuring out how to use much of the HTML coding that is required on this page, and she and I will continue to work together in order to separate the Notes and References.

Greg (citations): Greg has already completed a great deal of his citations for the sources section. He has used the standard Wikipedia formatting for citations, which we agreed would be the most user-friendly and consistent with other Wikipedia pages. As other groups add their information, he will continue to add citations to his list, and will continue to follow the layout of the Romeo and Juliet Sources section.

Amelia's Implementation Plan

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I will convert the current "References" section to only include references that are formatted in this way: "Wells and Dobson, p. 101." I will make sure that the references refer back to the correct sentence in the article and that they also refer to the correction citation in the newly created "Sources" section of the article.


Grace's Peer Edits

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As of now, the edits that our group is making are still in progress because we need to wait for the class to post theirs throughout the this weekend and next week. So far, we have been speaking in person about the changes we are making and issues we have faced in our own individual tasks. Halle has been making progress with learning how to add notes to the page. This will help organize the Notes section into its own area instead of being mixed in with other citations. Amelia plans to cite references in the format she mentioned above. On the Romeo and Juliet page, the references appear in this format as well. Throughout the week, we will check the references section to ensure that each reference is cited in that consistent format. Finally, Greg is editing the Sources part of the Wikipedia page. Using the format through Wikipedia, each citation should also be consistent in its form. As our classmates continue to add citations, we will help Greg when needed to cite both new and old sources properly.

Individual Implementation Plan: Due April 21st, 2019

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For my Individual Implementation Plan as part of the Formatting, Sources, References, and Notes group, I have already published my edits on the Cymbeline Wikipedia article.

Characters

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My role in my group for editing the Cymbeline Wikipedia page is to change the formatting of the "Characters" section and to remove, reformat, and add images to the article. As a class and as a group, we decided that the "Characters" section lacked development of sophisticated formatting because of its simple and unappealing list layout. There is no visual engagement from the previous formatting of the character list, which is crucial as it is the second section on the page. Using the Romeo and Juliet Wikipedia page as an example, I split the "Characters" section into two columns to improve the clarity of the list.[2] My other classmates will add additional information about the characters in this section, which means the content of this part of the article will be easier to read. To do this, I edited the Wikipedia article in visual editing mode. I clicked the "edit" button which allowed me to make changes to this section. Next, I clicked "edit" in a box that appeared to make changes to the transclusion. Clicking the "Div col" option at the bottom of the pop-up box allowed me to make alterations using the button that appears as a rectangle shaded one-fourth with black and the remainder of the shape with white. After this, I selected "Add more information" to make the column width 20em, then added a "Gap" size of 4em along with "Rules" by typing "yes" as instructed in the Wikipedia directions. Following this is a section for "Content" with the characters listed and divided into "In Britain," "In Rome," and "Apparitions." The columns in the "Characters" section are made separate and keep the rest of the article in tact by implementing the last feature, "Div col end."

On the Romeo and Juliet Wikipedia page, the columns are spaced at the width of 20em and it also contains rules. As a result, I used this specific measurement and the "Rules" feature to emulate the same effect on the Cymbeline page. However, I varied from the Romeo and Juliet article by adding the "Gap" of 4em. Because there are only two columns for the character list of Cymbeline, adding a gap between the columns spaces out the information more to eliminate more blank space on the page. These changes enhance the visual experience of the reader while looking at the Cymbeline article. Before, the "Characters" section was divided into columns, however they blended together as a result of a lack of boundaries between the sections. Now, this section looks more professional and clean on the page. This is due to the line that runs between the character list which makes it more manageable for the readers to comprehend as they are not confused by information appearing to blend together.

Formatting Images and Captions

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After looking at the original images included in the Cymbeline page, there was an imbalance of pictures from one section to the next. Because of this, my goal was to have pictures appear evenly throughout the article. Additionally, another initial concern was the relevancy of the pictures in terms of the content they resided next to. Each picture should not only act as an entity that takes up space on the page, but should contribute meaningfully to the information related to the article.

I first noticed that the aspect of the article that lacked visual appeal, the "Characters" list, would benefit from adding an image to catch the eye of the reader. One of the most notable and fascinating aspects of the characters in the play is that the spelling of Imogen varies on occasion and appears in some versions of the play as Innogen. Because of this, wanted to include this captivating piece of information through the use of an image. To start, I uploaded a picture that documents the spelling of Imogen's name as Innogen in a historical source Chronicles of England, Scotland, and Ireland published by Holinshed in 1587, found in Cymbeline edited by Valerie Wayne (which we have read for class). Using the application "Scanner for Me" on my iPhone, I took a picture of this image in my book and uploaded it to Wikipedia using the Commons Upload Wizard.[3] To do this, I selected "Insert," "Media," "Upload," clicked on the link for the Commons Upload Wizard, and selected the image from my desktop. Then, I clicked "Open," "Continue," "This file is not my own work," which led me to type the source of Cymbeline by Valerie Wayne and select the Creative Commons Attribution ShareALike 4.0 (legal code) from the option menu. After clicking "Next," I typed in the image title as "Imogen versus Innogen" and added the caption "Historical records show that Imogen is sometimes spelled as Innogen, as shown in this excerpt from Chronicles of England, Scotland, and Ireland published in 1587 in Cymbeline edited by Valerie Wayne" and the description "A picture included in Cymbeline edited by Valerie Wayne from Chronicles of England, Scotland, and Ireland published by Holinshed in 1587." The image appears on page 71 of Cymbeline." Finally, I added the date the work was first published as 1587 and published the image on Wikipedia.

After adding this image to the Creative Commons, I added it into the Cymbeline article through the actions of "Insert," "Media," searching "Imogen versus Innogen," selecting the image, adding the caption from above, and clicking "Insert." Once the picture was finally in the visual editing space, I placed it on the right side of the columns that contain the "Characters" list. Overall, this image clears up possible confusion of Wikipedia readers who notice that Imogen is occasionally spelled as Innogen. This is due to the fact that the caption I added explains this phenomena and provides an example of the spelling variation. Because of this image is added to the article, the "Characters" section makes a larger visual impact on the page and creates a more even spread of pictures in the article. The picture I added appears on the page as shown below:

This file can be used through the link:

https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/


I followed the same procedure above for adding the image from the play Cymbeline into the "Performance history" section. However, I made the image title "The Other Place" and the caption "Harriet Walter as Imogen and Jim Hopper playing Pisanio in Bill Alexander's play, The Other Place, 1987" with the description "This image is found in Cymbeline edited by Valerie Wayne on page 118, showing Bill Alexander’s play, The Other Place." I imported this image in order to delete the the previous image in this section of H.A. Saintsbury as Iachimo in 1906. This picture was out of place in this section because there is no mention of Saintsbury in "Performance history" and also no mention of him in the article as a whole. Because of this, I wanted to include a picture that pertains to the information being discussed about the history of the performance of Cymbeline. In Wayne's Cymbeline, the picture I chose is an image of the actors performing The Other Place. In the "Performance history" section, there is a short paragraph dedicated to this performance, which is why I placed the image on the right side of this part. To add to this, the caption I added of this picture provides the reader with context of the image in terms of the article, which they can use to relate it back to the information they are reading. Overall, this image is more relevant to the content of this particular section of the article in order to help the reader understand the article. The image that is now deleted from the page appeared as shown below:

H. A. Saintsbury as Iachimo, c. 1906

The new image in the "Performance history" section appears as shown below:


The file can be used through the link:

https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/


In the next section titled "Adaptations," there was a misplaced image of Imogen. The original image by Herbert Gustave Schmalz had no relation to the content being discussed about the different adaptations of Cymbeline and pictured Imogen drawing a sword. This picture is misplaced because the beginning of this part of the article talks about a play that was adapted from Cymbeline by Thomas D'Urfey called The Injured Princess or The Fatal Wager.[1] The article claims that in this adaptation, D’Urfey changed Imogen’s character to be named Eugenia. This is problematic because the name variation is not shown, as a picture of Imogen is placed directly next to the discussion of the different name Eugenia.[1] Because of this issue, I replaced the picture of Imogen with a picture of Thomas D'Urfey. To do this, I followed a different procedure. The image that I used was already available on Creative Commons, which means I had to do the following: delete the original picture and caption, click "Insert," "Media," search "Thomas D'Urfey," write the caption "Photograph of Thomas D'Urfey, who adapted and made changes to Shakespeare's Cymbeline in 1682," and "Insert." Then, I moved the image to the left side of the page by clicking "Edit," "Advanced," "Left." By adding this image, the readers of the article can associate the name of the person being discussed to the work he did in relation to Cymbeline as talked about in the article. The caption adds to the picture as it includes a link to Thomas D'Urfey's page for further reading and distinctly indicates that he adapted and made changes to Shakespeare's Cymbeline. Below, the original and deleted image is shown:

Imogen byHerbert Gustave Schmalz

The new image in the "Adaptations" section appears as shown below:

Photograph of Thomas D'Urfey, who adapted and made changes to Shakespeare's Cymbeline in 1682.


Next, I used the same procedure for the image of Thomas D'Urfey to import a picture of the movie poster in the "Screen adaptations" section of Cymbeline by Ethan Hawke. Originally, there was only one picture in the "Adaptations" section. This made this portion of the article appear lengthy and did not keep the readers engaged because of the amount of text present without breaks. To fix this issue, I found the picture by searching "Cymbeline (film)" and placed it on the right side of the section. As a result, the text is less strenuous to read and the images on the page are more balanced. Because screen adaptations are digital, it is logical to include a digital representation of a film being discussed into this section. The caption underneath this picture reads, "The cover of the movie Cymbeline by Ethan Hawke and Michael Almereyda made in 2013." With this information, the reader may seek out more knowledge about the movie and watch the film to understand the variations between the adaptation and the original play. It is also toward the end of the article, which means that readers could be more likely to complete their reading of the page in its entirety. Ultimately, the readers get to learn about the impact that media has on Shakespeare's works by being drawn into the article through this image. The picture of Ethan Hawke's Cymbeline appears on the Wikipedia page as shown below: center|thumb|The cover of the movie Cymbeline by Ethan Hawke and Michael Almereyda made in 2013.


Finally, the last image I added into the article is a picture of a musical piece from Cymbeline edited by Valerie Wayne to the "Cultural references" section using the same procedures as described in my editing of "Imogen versus Innogen" and "The Other Place" (the first and second images I discussed). In the original version of the article, there were no pictures in this section. Because one of my primary goals was to balance out the page in terms of when pictures are used, this provided me with the opportunity to add a meaningful image. The picture I chose shows the sheet music of the song "Hark, hark, the lark" that is performed in Act II, Scene 3 of the play. It is explicitly mentioned in this section of the page as 'Song' which is why it is important to refer to through an image.[1] I uploaded this picture to the Creative Commons using the title "Hark, hark, the lark" with the caption "The song that is played in Act II, Scene 3 of Cymbeline" and the description “Music included in Cymbeline edited by Valerie Wayne. This song appears on page 403 of this version of play" alongside the publication date of 1625-50 as stated in the play. Here, the image placed on the right side of the page acts as a real example of the 'Song' as it is written instead of having the article solely refer to its location. This adds a fascinating appeal to music in the article, which is unique and could inspire the readers to learn more about the role of music in Shakespeare's plays. The connection between the image and the written information can be made using the caption, which clearly states the location of the musical piece in the play. Overall, adding this image creates a balance in the page that is present through the article's end and adds a primary example of how the music would be played. The picture of the musical piece from Cymbeline appears on the Wikipedia page as shown below:



The file can be used through the link:

https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/

Other Formatting

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The last edits that I made in addition to the formatting changes in the "Characters" section and with the placement and movement of images are spread out within the article. This includes adding two spaces by hitting the "Enter" key on my keyboard to start the "Sources" section on it's own line. When I began editing the article, the "Sources" section intersected with the watercolor image placed above it. Because each section consistently starts on a new line, I fixed this minor detail to keep the formatting the same throughout the article. Additionally, I dragged the image shown in the "Date and text" section down one level to be centered in this portion of the page. Previously, the majority of the text was formatted to appear below the image. However, placing the picture in the center of the section breaks up the information in a way that more evenly distributes the text around it. Next, I moved the photograph showing Ellen Terry as Imogen in the "Performance history" section up a few lines as it was previously farther down in the section. This corresponds more with the information that discusses her role playing the character, which will draw the readers' eyes to the visual representation of her acting. In terms of editing my own work, I made a change to the caption of "The Other Place" by removing the word "in" before the year "1987" (I have already made the change in my sandbox as well). When reviewing my work, I noticed that I had already used the word "in" earlier in the caption, making it more smooth to read by referring only to the date of publication.


There are multiple sections that I did not alter in the article. The first of these untouched sections is the initial summary at the top of the page, which contains an image of Imogen in her bed-chamber. This picture is colorful and eye-catching, which makes it effectively placed to grab the readers' attention at the start of the article. Next, the "Synopsis" portion is well-developed with images alternating from the left and the right in the section. This is one of the strongest parts of the Cymbeline page, with the images representing important plot points such as Iachimo taking Imogen's bracelet in her sleep. These images already match and enrich the article with the content that is being discussed, and have the images placed in the best locations possible. In addition, I did not make any formatting or image edits to the "Sources" section. This area of the page, as discussed in class, is extremely under-developed. Because there is not much written in this portion as of now, adding any image would be too large and create formatting problems in the article. Lastly, I did not change anything in the "Reputation" section. In class, we talked about if this section is necessary to the article as a whole and that it might violate the bias guidelines set by Wikipedia. The controversial nature of this section and therefore its possible removal from the page deems an image unnecessary until our class moves forward with editing the article. Overall, the changes I made through the formatting and images of the Cymbeline Wikipedia article increase the page's readability and create an even balance to help ensure that readers receive the information they are looking for in the most effective way possible.

Additional Information

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I will also be assisting Greg with his part of the edits, which involves ensuring that each one of the sources in the Cymbeline article adheres to the style that is found in the Romeo and Juliet article. This will continue throughout the week as other groups make their edits to the page. The edits I have made using the reference format are listed below:

Reference guide: Author’s Last Name, Author’s First Name. (Publication Year). “Document Title.” Publisher’s Name. Volume Number (Edition Number). ISBN or DOI number.

  • 6. Original: Collier, S., Cutting to the heart of the matter, in Shakespearean Power and Punishment, ed. Kendall, G. M., (Fairleigh Dickinson Univ. Press, 1998), pg. 39
    • Edited: Collier, Susan. (1998). "Cutting to the heart of the matter, in Shakespearean Power and Punishment: A Volume of Essays." Fairleigh Dickinson University Press. ISBN: 9780838636794.
  • 9. Original: Nye, Robert (30 July 2012). "The Late Mr Shakespeare". Allison & Busby – via Google Books.
    • Edited: Nye, Robert. (2012). "The Late Mr. Shakespeare." Arcade Pub. ISBN: 1611457157.
  • 10. Original: Cull, Marisa R. (19 September 2018). "Shakespeare's Princes of Wales: English Identity and the Welsh Connection." Oxford University Press – via Google Books.
    • Edited: Cull, Marisa. (2014). "Shakespeare's Princes of Wales: English Identity and the Welsh Connection." Oxford University Press. doi: 10.1093/acprof:oso/9780198716198.001.0001.
  • 21. Original: White, Martin, Renaissance Drama in Action (London: Routledge, 1998): 213
    • Edited: White, Martin. (1998). "Renaissance Drama in Action." Routledge. ISBN: 9780415067386.
  • 28. Original: Potter, Lois, "The 2001 Globe Season: Celts and Greenery," Shakespeare Quarterly 52 (2002): 100.
    • Edited: Potter, Lois. (2001). "The 2001 Globe Season: Celts and Greenery." Shakespeare Quarterly. 53 (1). doi: 10.1353/shq.2002.0013.
  • 48. Original: OPERA GROWS IN BROOKLYN. Retrieved February 9, 2015.
    • This link leads to a dead end, I recommend removing it from the page. It says the page has been moved or deleted.
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(3-5) Links to other articles: I have practiced linking in my edits to the Cymbeline Wikipedia page. In the captions of the images I have proposed for my part of the project, I have linked to Thomas D'Urfey, Judi Dench, Royal Shakespeare Company, Patrick Stewart, and Franz Schubert.


(2-3) Link to article that is being edited: The Cymbeline article is already linked in the Thomas D'Urfey, which I checked leads the correct page. For practice, I went through the steps of linking the article, but did not publish my changes as the page is already included in the article. I also did this by practicing again on actress Ellen Terry's page who played Imogen in 1896. Here, I went through the steps of linking Cymbeline to Ellen Terry's page where they talk about her role as Imogen. Because the page already has the correct link to Cymbeline, I checked that it was correct and did not publish my changes because the page is already linked.


For the second part of this assignment, it involves practicing uploading images. Because this is my focus in our Wikipedia project, I have done this multiple times for my sandbox already. Below, I have included an example of a adding an image to Wikipedia from Creative Commons.

Judi Dench, who played Imogen in 1980 for the Royal Shakespeare Company, and Patrick Stewart unveil a portrait of Shakespeare painted by 90 artists on April 23, 2006.


This exercise is due 4/27.

April 8th, 2019: Copyedit an article

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For this Wikipedia exercise, I continued to make changes on the Wikipedia page for Shakespeare: The Animated Tales.[4] Because this practice exercise calls for grammatical and language improvement, I made edits to the "Creation" section under the "Development" portion of the article.

My edits include:

"The series was constructed by recording the scripts before any animation had been created."

"Actors were hired by Leon Garfield who had written a series of prose adaptations of Shakespeare's plays for children called Shakespeare Stories in 1985, to recite abbreviated versions of the plays written."

"This didn't make him especially popular with some of the directors, but his role was essential for the series to be completed on time and under budget."

The edit summary for my changes can be viewed in the edit history of this page. I completed this assignment early as it is due on April 14th.

April 8th, 2019: Add to an article

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For the Add to an Article Wikipedia exercise, I chose to add to the Wikipedia page for Shakespeare: The Animated Tales.[5] In the introduction of this article, I added the sentence "However, the series has been critiqued for the large number of scenes cut to make the episodes shorter in length." There are no critiques of the series included in the article, and this one sentence could likely be expanded into an entire section on its own. After the sentence, I added a citation from the source I used called "Teens, Shakespeare, and the Dumbing Down Cliché: The Case of The Animated Tales" by Gregory M. Colón Semenza.[6] To do this, I used the steps I learned in the citation training module. I completed this assignment early as it is due on April 14th.

Article Evaluation for ENGL304: Kairos[7]

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  • Evaluating content:
    • Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
      • For the article I chose to evaluate, I was assigned to edit the page in ENGL489J: Digital Rhetorics last spring. Although my peers and I made some improvements to the page on Kairos, there is a lot more work that needs to be done for it to be deemed a useful Wikipedia page. Everything that is already on the page is relevant to Kairos, and the different sections include: a general definition, origins, context in classical rhetoric, modern rhetorical definition, context in Christian theology, context in science, context in digital media, along with "see also," "notes," and "further reading." Initially, I was distracted by the two images on the right side of the page as they lack clear captions to help determine what they are.
    • Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
      • In the citations, the sources range from 1968-2012. Given that the 1968 citation is work by Lloyd Bitzer, that source is still relevant although it was published relatively long ago. However, the sources in the 2000s should be revisited to ensure that they are still relevant. It would be helpful to put the older sources in conversation with newer resources pertaining to Kairos and how its use has changed over time. The portion of Kairos in digital media is what I added along with my peers this past spring, and I believe it needs more credible source citations to support what was added. However, I do not believe new sections are necessary to add to this article.
    • What else could be improved?
      • The format of the page would benefit from choosing a single picture instead of two pictures placed on the right side of the page. It is distracting to have two pictures in line with each other, especially with weak captions. Also, the headings should all match in format, which means the "Modern rhetorical definition" title should be changed to "In modern rhetoric." In sum, there is no "wow" factor to this page, which should be added through a specific example of howKairos is used for the audience to remain interested.
  • Evaluating tone:
    • Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
      • The article has a neutral tone, however it appeals only to the Christian religion. This may seem like those contributing to the page only see the importance of Kairos from a narrow point of view. This can be fixed by adding sections that pertain to other religions or a statement saying it is not relevant or used in other religions. This is the only indication of bias in the article, as the rest of the work is written in a more technical way.
    • Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
      • This aligns with my response to the question above, as the viewpoint that pertains to Christian theology can be considered overrepresented in the article. This is due to the fact that there is an entire section dedicated to the Christian religion, which no mention of other religions. Because this is the case, other religions are underrepresented in the article. A solution to this would be to add more information about why it is used in Christian theology and not in other theologies. Or, if Kairos is used in other theologies, expanding on this would help the article.
  • Evaluating sources:
    • Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
      • All of the links provided in the citations work and open a page with the source provided. However, sources 3, 11, 12, and 13 do not have links included in the citations. Links to these resources should be added in order for the page to be deemed reliable. Ultimately, all of the citations contribute valuable, credible information that is relevant to the term Kairos. However, it established more exigence to add in links to the sources that are missing links in their citations.
    • Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
      • Most of the facts on the page reference an appropriate, reliable reference. This is indicated by proper citations that were added during the editing process. The main issue in the citations portion of the Kairos page are the citations that do not have links attached to them. These sources are mainly peer reviewed journals which helps the credibility of the page greatly, and they are talked about in a neutral way. The portion of the page that I worked on in ENGL489J is the digital media section of this page, which could be considered biased in some ways. The bias is not noted, however, there is a lot of paraphrasing that lacks citation. More citations in the digital media portion would lessen the bias in the article.
  • Checking the Talk Page:
    • What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
      • The Talk Page is underdeveloped on the Kairos article. There are only 6 conversations started about this article that propose minor changes such as a dispute about the Chinese word for "crisis" in 2006. However, one person talked about a questionable source which is helpful (2012) and another person recommended that the page be restructured (2008). Overall, the conversations on the Talk Page are mostly about revitalizing the article and making it reliable for people to reference.
    • How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?
      • This article is rated as a "C" on the quality scale and does not yet have a rating on the importance scale. This means that it is a developed article but may be missing significant information, have unnecessary information, include a few reliable sources, but overall can still be improved greatly.[8] Kairos on Wikipedia is part of the WikiProject Time, which has the goal of strengthening how time is covered on Wikipedia (because Kairos is a term about timing). Also, the Kairos page was already part of the Wiki Education Foundation for students to revise, which I participated in last spring. Still, the article would benefit from a lot more work!
    • How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?
      • In class, we have not talked about the term Kairos as we are permitted to choose articles for this evaluation that do not relate to our class. However, evaluating this article made it clear to me that examples of great Wikipedia pages such as Romeo and Juliet take a large amount of time and effort to complete. But, this time and effort is necessary in order to make the information helpful to those using Wikipedia. It is important that our class is participating in the Wiki Education Foundation because the Cymbeline page needs to reach a point where it is productive, which means it is useful and necessary for us to spend time revising the article.

Article Evaluation: "List of most popular websites"[9]

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    • Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
      • Everything in the article is relevant to the article topic. There is a brief introduction to what the article is listing, the most influential websites, and how they are ranked. Nothing distracted me on this page.
    • Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
      • This article is neutral and uses only hard facts to support it's claims. There is no bias because the information is based on data with quality sources.
    • Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
      • There are no viewpoints represented because the article is only using data to prove its claims.
    • Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that should be added?
      • There is a warning at the top of the page that says this information is outdated and needs to be updated. This list is from 2017, so it needs to be reworked for 2018.
    • Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
      • Each source as a reference but the data on this page is unreliable because it is outdated. The information comes from a variety of sources that include peer-reviewed information about how the list was made and how the order was determined. These are neutral, unbiased sources because it is factual data.
    • Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
      • All of the citations lead to the page they are directed to. They support the claims in the article, however the claims in the article are outdated.
    • Check out the Talk page of the article. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
      • The Talk page has a discussion dating back to 2013 about the data being wrong and needing to be reordered. Users say that this page is pointless because the information given is incorrect.
    • How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?
      • The article is not rated well because of its mistakes and is not part of any WikiProjects.
    • How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way it's been discussed in class?
      • The way this Wikipedia page discusses this topic differs from the way it's been discussed in class because we did not use any sources to back up what we each considered the most influential website in our lives. Although the data is outdated, there are citations for websites that were used to support the claims made in this article.
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Added the sentence for the "Add to an article" assignment (List of most popular websites):

This is an updated list of the most popular websites on the Internet. These websites are proven to be the most influential websites of all time according to Time Magazine.(http://time.com/4960202/most-influential-websites/) to the "List of most popular websites" Wikipedia page.

Made the following changes for the "Copyediting an article" assignment: Gilster described digital literacy as the usage and comprehension of information in the digital age, and also emphasized the importance of digital technologies as an "essential life skill (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Digital_literacy).

Computer literacy refers to knowledge and skills in using traditional computers, such as desktop PCs and laptops, and previously proceeded digital literacy.

However, there is a large significance as a result of the combination of these two terms.


Week Three: Choose Possible Topics Assignment: Choose 3-5 articles and talk about improvements, then choose 2-3 articles to provide sources for and what can be improved.

Topic: Internet Culture https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Website_spoofing The talk section indicates that this page is poorly written. It had unnecessary content that has already been removed by previous users and lacks sufficient resources. Sources: https://www.trendmicro.com/vinfo/us/security/definition/website-spoofing http://sip.cs.princeton.edu/pub/spoofing.pdf http://www.telegraph.co.uk/technology/3355193/Top-ten-spoof-websites.html


Topic: Virtual Reality Worlds https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Webkinz This article stood out to me because the first notification of the page says that it needs to be updated and needs additional citations for verification. It is about the online child's world of Webkinz. Sources: http://tpcjournal.nbcc.org/wp-content/uploads/2012/11/cyberbullying-prevention_Wright_p169-177-Final.pdf http://www.emeraldinsight.com/doi/abs/10.1108/00220411211225566?mbSc=1&fullSc=1&journalCode=jd https://www.questia.com/library/journal/1P3-1912955531/developing-the-gamer-disposition-the-key-to-training

Topic: Online dating applications https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Online_dating_applications This page gives brief information about online dating. However, the information seems too general. This article seems to have been made my a student and has peer reviews in the talk section, indicating that the organization needs to be changed and more sources are needed. Sources: https://www3.nd.edu/~ghaeffel/OnineDating_Aron.pdf http://journals.plos.org/plosone/article?id=10.1371/journal.pone.0165394 http://journals.sagepub.com/doi/abs/10.1177/1440783316662718

Topic: Social Media https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Yik_Yak The talk page of this article indicates that the information should be updated as a result of most of the information on the page being provided by a deactivated, single-use account. Sources with information about the more advanced features of the application would improve this article. Because this assignment only requires sources to be found for 2-3 of the 3-5 articles we needed to find, I will not be providing sources for this article.

  1. ^ a b c d e "Cymbeline", Wikipedia, 2019-04-20, retrieved 2019-04-20
  2. ^ "Romeo and Juliet", Wikipedia, 2019-04-16, retrieved 2019-04-20
  3. ^ "Login required - Wikimedia Commons". commons.wikimedia.org. Retrieved 2019-04-20.
  4. ^ "Shakespeare: The Animated Tales", Wikipedia, 2019-04-08, retrieved 2019-04-08
  5. ^ "Shakespeare: The Animated Tales", Wikipedia, 2019-04-08, retrieved 2019-04-08
  6. ^ Semenza, Gregory M. Colón (2008-07-17). "Teens, Shakespeare, and the Dumbing Down Cliché: The Case of The Animated Tales". Shakespeare Bulletin. 26 (2): 37–68. doi:10.1353/shb.0.0006. ISSN 1931-1427.
  7. ^ "Kairos", Wikipedia, 2019-03-26, retrieved 2019-04-03
  8. ^ "Wikipedia:WikiProject Wikipedia/Assessment", Wikipedia, 2019-03-13, retrieved 2019-04-03
  9. ^ "List of most popular websites". Wikipedia. 2018-01-09.

Response to Peer Reviews

The feedback my group received on our changes to the "Kairos" article were extremely helpful and constructive. Alisa talked about how she believed we had begun our edits in a sufficient manner, and should focus on placing a section between the "origins" and "classical" definitions of kairos. Additionally, she recommended we expand the application of kairos to the modern world. We took Alisa's advice during our final drafting of the project, as we added a section about kairos in science, kairos in digital media, and the problem of context in the digital world.

The next review was written by Vanna, in which she recommended we focus on the sophist application of the term, in which research has been generated by sophists that someone's own truth can be constructed , make people believe it, and using timing to make sure they do in fact believe it. This was an extremely interesting point for Vanna to make, however because I focused on the modern applications of kairos, I did not focus on this area of the term.

The last peer review we received came form Nate, who recommended that we expand on the two sides of the debate surrounding kairos. The way Nate recommended we achieve this is by finding scholarship that will be useful in making both sides of the argument. Although I understand what Nate was saying, we need to keep in mind that Wikipedia is a neutral online encyclopedia. Because of this, we took our sources and rephrased the information in an unbiased manner. We appreciate that Nate commented on how our article was developing nicely, however the unbiased nature of Wikipedia prohibited us from taking this advice. Overall, receiving feedback from our peers was helpful in guiding the final edits of our article and making sure we covered the topic effectively.

All sources found (3 used in actual article) for Wikipedia page titled "Kairos:"

Kairos and New Media: Enculturation. enculturaltion.net. Retrieved 2018-02-22.

Lockridge, Timothy1, timlockridge@miamioh.edu, et al. "The Kairos Preservation Project." Computers & Composition, vol. 46, Dec. 2017, pp. 72-86. EBSCOhost,

doi:10.1016/j.compcom.2017.09.002.

Peary, Alexandria. "The Role of Mindfulness inKairos". Rhetoric Review. 35 (1): 22–34. doi:10.1080/07350198.2016.1107825.

Porter, James E. (2009). "Recovering Delivery for Digital Rhetoric." PDF. Computers and Composition: 207-224.

Sills, Ellery. "Emerging Genres, Dangerous Classifications: The Kairos of Digital Composing Policy." Dissertation Abstracts International, vol. 78, no. 5, Nov. 2017.

EBSCOhost, search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=mzh&AN=2017873944&site=ehost-live.


References (Cymbeline - ENGL 304)

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  2. Dobson & Wells 2001, p. vii
  3. Hoeniger 1957, p. 133
  4. Shakespeare 2017
  5. "Decameron" 2010
  6. "Here" 2019
  7. Shakespeare 1955, p. xxv-xxvi
  8. Shakespeare 2017
  9. Dobson & Wells 2001, p. 101
  10. Collier 1998, p. 39
  11. Halliday 1964, p. 366
  12. Dodwell 2013
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  16. Harcourt 1922, p. 64
  17. Bloom 2000, p. 2
  18. Shakespeare 1998, p. 2
  19. Dobson & Wells 2001, p. 91
  20. Halliday 1964, p.125
  21. Dowden 1899, p. xli
  22. Odell 1920, p. 94
  23. Pollock 1875, p. 526
  24. Odell 1920, p. 596
  25. Martin 1998, p. 213
  26. Leiter 1986, p. 105
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  28. Trewin 1964, p. 304
  29. Findlater 1983, p. 18
  30. Levin 1962
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  39. Odell 1920, p. 62
  40. Hazelton 1927, p. 103–4
  41. Dowden 1889, p. xli
  42. Odell 1920, p. 262
  43. Dowden 1889, p. xlii
  44. Hart 2011, p. 170
  45. Dukore & Shaw 1973, p. 212
  46. "BFI Screenonline" 1983
  47. "Ethan Hawke" 2013
  48. Patten 2013
  49. Patten 2013

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