User:Gabbydh47/Organochlorine compound/Horseshoecrab3 Peer Review
Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
ContentGuiding questions:
Tone and BalanceGuiding questions:
Sources and ReferencesGuiding questions:
OrganizationGuiding questions:
Images and MediaGuiding questions: If your peer added images or media
For New Articles OnlyIf the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
Overall impressionsGuiding questions:
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
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General info
[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing?
Gabbydh47
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:Gabbydh47/Organochlorine compound
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Organochlorine compound
Evaluate the drafted changes
[edit]The lead has been updated to summarize the types of products that organochlorine compounds are found in and the effects they have on living things, however, this is the extent of the edits. I would suggest replacing the comma between "carbon" and "chlorine" in the second sentence with the word "and" in order to improve readability as well as removing the word "adverse" in the fourth sentence when referring to how organochlorine compounds affect organisms in order to reduce bias because, as stated in the "toxicity" section, not all organochlorine compounds have negative effects. Besides this, the article has a neutral tone and balanced viewpoints. The lead is also missing a brief description of the "Natural occurrence", "Preparation", and "Reactions" sections. The strengths of the lead are that it is concise, it includes an introductory sentence that clearly describes the article's topic, and it does not include information that is not present in the article.
The content added is relevant to the topic and up-to-date. The article would benefit from adding more information about regulation of organochlorine compounds if available. All new content is backed up by reliable secondary sources of information (Merriam-Webster dictionary and the European Environmental Agency glossary). The content accurately reflects what the cited sources say. The sources listed in the bibliography are thorough, current, written by authors from different countries, and reflect the available literature on the topic.
The article is well-organized and is broken into sections that reflect major points about the topic. The article already includes a well-captioned image of the chemical structure of an example of an organochloride, but more images would provide visuals of the natural occurrence of an organochloride in tree frogs in addition to the application of organochlorine compounds in polyvinyl chloride, pesticides, and insulators.