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Falldel24

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User:Falldel24/Stucco decoration in Islamic architecture
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Stucco decoration in Islamic architecture

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You added more details to further understand the technique, but some of the content you added was already touched on. However you did go futher in depth, so perhaps you could reorder your information.

The article originally says "Alternatively, the stucco could be cast from molds." and I would recomment putting your sentence "These molds were typically made out of wood then they would apply multiple layers of the stucco to the walls and stamp on the molds to cast the design on the wall." afterwards to add to the original information rather than repeating the use of molds.

Then, you could leave this sentence at the end of the paragraph: "Sometimes, the architects would go in after the stucco has had time to dry and carve into the stucco to add even more detail to the walls. After this, the stucco on the walls would usually be painted over or whitewashed just to make it have a cleaner finish."

Also make sure to cite your souces after both sentences!

Overall, you added valuable information, but reordering it would allow for cohesion between the original article and you additions.