User:Ellad/sandbox
My Name is Ella
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"Pick and Draft Your Article" due October 14th
The Article I'm choosing to edit is the "Toxocaridae" Wikipedia article. Zoonotic diseases are interesting and I have never heard of this one and want to learn more about it.
Many sections of this article are weak in the sense that there is not a lot written within them. I plan on adding a few sentences from a number of references under either the "prevent" section, or creating an additional section. I must first research and find suitable sources, in addition to see what the article already has.
update: With further research, I found a subtopic that interests me: Toxicara and asthma. Nothing has been written about it in this article, and I am going to add a section on it.
bibliography:
Holland, Celia, and H. V. Smith. Toxocara: The Enigmatic Parasite. Wallingford, UK: CABI Pub., 2006. Print.
Pinelli, E., J. Dormans, and I. Van Die. "Toxocara and Asthma." Toxocara: The Enigmatic Parasite (n.d.): 42-57. Web.
Cobzaru, RG, C. Rîpă, MM Leon, MC Luca, A. Ivan, and M. Luca. "Result Filters." National Center for Biotechnology Information. U.S. National Library of Medicine, 2012. Web. 02 Oct. 2016.
Update: below is the addition to the wiki page that I have completed
Association with asthma[edit | edit source] Infection with Toxocara has been shown to stimulate atopic disease, specifically asthma.[2] When infected with this parasite, many asthma-like symptoms occur such as accumulation of eosinophils, an inflammatory response, and production of IgE, the immunoglobulins associated with allergic responses.[3] People with asthma are more likely to have Toxocara seropositivity.[4] Research suggests that the IgE production stimulated by infection with Toxocara may contribute to the onsets of allergic asthma in children.[5] The effects of how parasite load, frequency of exposure, and influence of genetics affect this relationship between Toxocara infection and allergic asthma are still unknown, yet important in understanding how to prevent asthma and other atopic diseases around the globe.[6]
Editing Keiran's article 1025/2016
Very good! I like the many small sections. Besides removing a few commas, i would also advice you instead of saying "given the mode of infection", explain the mode of infection, and don't require readers to remember back to what that is or to imply it themselves. Additionally, "Antibiotics such as Tetracyclines are also used" under treatment doesn't flow with the overall sentence structure, you might want to add a little more to that to make the tone feel more informational yet casual.
Below is the "edited" version of Keiran's draft, which mostly includes additions or deletions of commas and slashes to make sentense structure flow. Grammar is excellent, and there is lots of good information added. "Causes
The Actinomyces bacteria that cause lumpy jaw are always present in a healthy cattle's mouth. In order for infection to occur there must be tissue damage, which is often caused by unusually rough feed that scratches the mouth of the animal or by contact with sharp objects such as sticks or brambles. Given the mode of infection, lumpy jaw is not contagious.
Treatment
[The affected areas are treated with iodine solutions.] A common method to achieve this is to give the cattle sodium iodide orally on a regular treatment schedule. [Antibiotics such as Tetracyclines are also used.] These two treatment methods can be used alone or together; simultaneous use is considered more aggressive. Killing the bacteria that cause the infection is the ultimately purpose of these treatment methods. However, they are seldom effective unless treatment is started very early.[1][2]
It is notable that surgery is not typically considered for treatment of cattle as it is in extreme human cases.[3]
Misdiagnosis
As is often the case, there are diseases or conditions with signs and symptoms that are similar to actinomycosis so it can easily be misdiagnosed. Some misdiagnoses include abscesses caused by grass seeds, woody tongue, bottle jaw, cancerous growths, and irritation caused by lodges objects.[1]
Editing Kyle's article 10/25/2016
Kyle didn't actually create a draft of what he was going to say, but he created a draft in the sense of planning out exactly what he wanted to add to this article, below is Kyle's plan copied from his sandbox. What isn't clear is if he will be creating new sections of the article, or adding to already existing ones. I think deciding this and creating a draft are the next steps!
In the treatment section of the article, I would like to specify how there are three medical treatments: diethylcarbamazine, albendazole, and ivermectin[1] (Links to an external site.). Depending on how in depth I want to go into it, I can then discuss how each treatment is implemented and discuss further details behind the treatments. The article does not discuss any of the side effects that the treatments cause, and some of which can be rather severe. I would like to go into detail on some of the side effects of these treatments, such as head aches and nausea and vomiting[1] (Links to an external site.). Next, I would address the sentence that states that the medications are to "no effect on the adult worms". This sentence does not provide any sources to support that information, and during my research I have in fact found multiple sources that state of the treatments killing the adult worms[2] (Links to an external site.)[1] (Links to an external site.).
11/6/2016 Final draft of article Taking the advice of my peer mentors, I revised some of my sentences. They were right, some did not flow as well as they could and were a bit lengthy. In addition, I made sure that my sources didn't allow me to be biased.
Association with asthma[edit | edit source] Infection with Toxocara has been shown to stimulate atopic disease, specifically asthma.[2] Infection with this parasite causes asthma-like symptoms such as accumulation of eosinophils, an inflammatory response, and production of IgE, the immunoglobulins associated with allergic responses.[3] People with asthma are shown to have a higher prevalence of Toxocara seropositivity, highlighting a positive association between the two.[4] Research suggests that the IgE production stimulated by infection with Toxocara may contribute to the onsets of allergic asthma in children.[5] The effects of how parasite load, frequency of exposure, and influence of genetics affect this relationship between Toxocara infection and allergic asthma are still unknown, yet important in understanding how to prevent asthma and other atopic diseases around the globe.[6]