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This user is a student editor in Texas_AM/Technical_Editing_(Spring_2018). |
Articles That Need Improvement
[edit]- -weak lead description
- -"crema catalana" section should a under the "History" section
- -Order of contents seems disorganized: would make more sense for it to be history, crema catalana (if not included in history section), ingredients, technique
- -The technique section could use for some expansion on how the dish is made (for example, the making of the custard)
- -Image of "creme brulee flambee" seems out of place as it could give people the wrong impression of the dish, as creme brulee is rarely served on fire
- -potential content misconception: the topping is caramelized sugar, not caramel: and there is a stark difference between the two
- -most edits in the history tab are just small copyedits such as grammar or spelling fixes
- -tag says it needs additional citations for verification
- -lead description is too long and includes specific information that may better fit in subsections
- -pictures should go with specific subsets not at the end of the article
- -lacking information and elaboration under the specific types of coffee cake
- -the recent edits only seem to deal with minor spelling corrections and one person who swapped out the images
- -lacks flow, the tone shifts from sentence to sentence, sort of like a patchwork quilt of a wiki page
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Articles
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Begin Working,Problems and Tasks
[edit]1. Act
- Lead section needs to be more concise
- "structure" section could be added
- the sections and sub-sections need to be re organized; lead, history, structures, number of acts, other media
- should not be so focused around "3-act plays"
- lead section should be shorter and more concise
- tone needs to be corrected from that of a opinion essay
- biased statements should be removed/ reworded when possible
- needs a more reader-friendly tone, less like an academic textbook
- "social theories" in lead should be "social theory" in the first sentence of lead