User:Edwardx/sandbox/MED3040
10 March exercises
[edit]These are excerpts from the current versions of Wikipedia pages that we will improve today.
This is the very first paragraph of the article. Think about punctuation. Is there anything missing? And what about the reference?
Hendon is a London suburb situated in the London Borough of Barnet, 7 miles (11 km) northwest of Charing Cross. Hendon was an ancient parish in the county of Middlesex and has formed part of Greater London since 1965.[1]
Another first sentence. Think about linking (although there are other issues). Can you find a link that is not necessary? And something else that should be linked?
Hendon Aerodrome was an aerodrome in Hendon, north London, England that was an important centre for aviation between 1908 and 1968.
The first paragraph. Look at just the first and last sentences. There is a stylistic issue, an issue with capital letters, and ambiguity. Can you spot the ambiguity?
Middlesex University (abbr. MU or MDX) is a university in Hendon, North west London, England. It is located within the historic county boundaries of Middlesex from which it takes its name. It is one of the new universities and is a member of Million+ working group. As is the case with many former polytechnics, Middlesex was formally organised as a teaching institution in 1973, yet can trace its history back to 19th century.
The start of the "History" section of the same article. Look at the second and last sentences. Can you spot the ambiguity and the redundancy?
The university grew out of merger between different schools and colleges in North London. Perhaps the most prominent and one of the oldest of its constituent establishments is the Hornsey College of Art, founded in 1882. Other institutions include Ponders End Technical Institute (founded in 1901) and Hendon Technical Institute (founded in 1939). All three institutions were successfully amalgamated to form Middlesex Polytechnic in January 1973.